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checkin in homie................. good luck to both of us
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Jersey In da building !
Yo Listen young gun.......you ain't ready to pop off...........
You Being Hot ? Only when eating chicken wit Hot Sauce...
Nigga , I had ya moms last night , that marked savior....
Figure Im ya " Father " you can call me " Darth Vader "....
Go back and Study ya ryhmes and shitty old raps......,
stole that , money and dimes, sold Pitiful Tracks........
Ya flow is way off , dude , like a broken water pipe......
Ya Verses are rusted.......................................
...........chances of you winning ? Only by Rolling Dice !
Your skills couldn't get you rich even if you were playing monopoly
And in this battle you couldn't get votes not even from Democracy
You need to take your ryhme book , feed it to the dumb rats
..............Cause Im getting tired of you and your stunt raps
Man I ripped and smoked this dude only thing left was a blunt wrap !
Good luck man !
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Check Good Closer
thanks man
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Rippin Mc's Taking Dey Souls.... You Winning Gotta Betta Chance Seeing Micheal Wit A Real Nose... You Soft Trying Act Hard Now All Of Sudden... Jerseys Finest Why Am I Battling Da Bootleg Version Of Joe Budden... I'm Winning And He Mad... Nigga I'ma Give You So Much L's Dey Goin Put Ya Ass In A Rehab...(a Place Where Dey Put People Wit Drug Problems) Face It Nigga You Can't Spit... And Ya Punches Like A Bad Baseball Player Cause Dey Can't Hit... Can't Rap So Try Cursing Ya Lines... Nigga You Could Work At A Proffesional Hospital Wit Those Nursery Rhymes...(okay) Ya Closer's Okay But Wat A Bad Way To Start Of Shit... You Wouldn't Win Even If I Gave You 4 Votes To Start Of Wit...(okay) You Losin Only Thing You Beating Is Ya Cock...and Pursuit Dat Verse You Droped Make's Darkcide Look Like D-block...
From Da 3 Point Line Is Da Only Time You Shoot... Damn You Reach Gettin Ko Nowonder Ya Names Pursuit...(pursuit Means To Reach Something Or To Follow Something)
Couldn't Think Of No Good Punches Oh Well
Yo Listen young gun.......you ain't ready to pop off...........
You Being Hot ? Only when eating chicken wit Hot Sauce...
Nigga , I had ya moms last night , that marked savior....
Figure Im ya " Father " you can call me " Darth Vader "....
Go back and Study ya ryhmes and shitty old raps......,
stole that , money and dimes, sold Pitiful Tracks........
Ya flow is way off , dude , like a broken water pipe......
Ya Verses are rusted.......................................
...........chances of you winning ? Only by Rolling Dice !
Your skills couldn't get you rich even if you were playing monopoly
And in this battle you couldn't get votes not even from Democracy
You need to take your ryhme book , feed it to the dumb rats
..............Cause Im getting tired of you and your stunt raps
Man I ripped and smoked this dude only thing left was a blunt wrap
vs
Rippin Mc's Taking Dey Souls.... You Winning Gotta Betta Chance Seeing Micheal Wit A Real Nose... You Soft Trying Act Hard Now All Of Sudden... Jerseys Finest Why Am I Battling Da Bootleg Version Of Joe Budden... I'm Winning And He Mad... Nigga I'ma Give You So Much L's Dey Goin Put Ya Ass In A Rehab...(a Place Where Dey Put People Wit Drug Problems) Face It Nigga You Can't Spit... And Ya Punches Like A Bad Baseball Player Cause Dey Can't Hit... Can't Rap So Try Cursing Ya Lines... Nigga You Could Work At A Proffesional Hospital Wit Those Nursery Rhymes...(okay) Ya Closer's Okay But Wat A Bad Way To Start Of Shit... You Wouldn't Win Even If I Gave You 4 Votes To Start Of Wit...(okay) You Losin Only Thing You Beating Is Ya Cock...and Pursuit Dat Verse You Droped Make's Darkcide Look Like D-block...
From Da 3 Point Line Is Da Only Time You Shoot... Damn You Reach Gettin Ko Nowonder Ya Names Pursuit...(pursuit Means To Reach Something Or To Follow Something)
blunt- u had some nice punches but ya structure was awful. this made it harder to see where ya rhymes were and it made some of ya punches weaker.you need next time to watch ya structure and keep the flow of the rap in motion. you may have had a stronger verse if the structure was there.
pursuit- awsome rap, nice punches, amazing flow, awsome closer it was a really good verse in genral. ive got to give u some props on that verse. it was impressive.
vote/pursuit
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P.
Yo Listen young gun.......you ain't ready to pop off...........
You Being Hot ? Only when eating chicken wit Hot Sauce...
ok, decent opener
Nigga , I had ya moms last night , that marked savior....
Figure Im ya " Father " you can call me " Darth Vader "....
weak
Go back and Study ya ryhmes and shitty old raps......,
stole that , money and dimes, sold Pitiful Tracks........
just a rhyme no punch
Ya flow is way off , dude , like a broken water pipe......
Ya Verses are rusted.......................................
...........chances of you winning ? Only by Rolling Dice !
iight
Your skills couldn't get you rich even if you were playing monopoly
And in this battle you couldn't get votes not even from Democracy
i get it but could of worded better,
You need to take your ryhme book , feed it to the dumb rats
..............Cause Im getting tired of you and your stunt raps
Man I ripped and smoked this dude only thing left was a blunt wrap !
self-glory, nah
this was alil weak, your punches was not hard hitten at all, u needed some better wording if u had that ur verse would of been good. also ur flow was good the structure was koo but take all them periods of iight.
B.
Rippin Mc's Taking Dey Souls.... You Winning Gotta Betta Chance Seeing Micheal Wit A Real Nose... You Soft Trying Act Hard Now All Of Sudden... Jerseys Finest Why Am I Battling Da Bootleg Version Of Joe Budden... I'm Winning And He Mad... Nigga I'ma Give You So Much L's Dey Goin Put Ya Ass In A Rehab...(a Place Where Dey Put People Wit Drug Problems) Face It Nigga You Can't Spit... And Ya Punches Like A Bad Baseball Player Cause Dey Can't Hit... Can't Rap So Try Cursing Ya Lines... Nigga You Could Work At A Proffesional Hospital Wit Those Nursery Rhymes...(okay) Ya Closer's Okay But Wat A Bad Way To Start Of Shit... You Wouldn't Win Even If I Gave You 4 Votes To Start Of Wit...(okay) You Losin Only Thing You Beating Is Ya Cock...and Pursuit Dat Verse You Droped Make's Darkcide Look Like D-block...
From Da 3 Point Line Is Da Only Time You Shoot... Damn You Reach Gettin Ko Nowonder Ya Names Pursuit...(pursuit Means To Reach Something Or To Follow Something)
did want to break that verse down cuz u can't but i read it and it was a good verse. your punches was good, they were more connected and it hit hard. your flow was good, u had a good creativity work on hard personals, and fix ur structure up 2. its hard to break that down iight.
v/blunt
Can Ya Help Me Wit Struture How Do I Fix Dat Let Me No Plz
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Pursuit
Yo Listen young gun.......you ain't ready to pop off...........
You Being Hot ? Only when eating chicken wit Hot Sauce...
lol dope 7/10
Nigga , I had ya moms last night , that marked savior....
Figure Im ya " Father " you can call me " Darth Vader "....
ok punch 5/10
Go back and Study ya ryhmes and shitty old raps......,
stole that , money and dimes, sold Pitiful Tracks........
ok 5/10
Ya flow is way off , dude , like a broken water pipe......
Ya Verses are rusted.......................................
...........chances of you winning ? Only by Rolling Dice !
ok punch 5/10
Your skills couldn't get you rich even if you were playing monopoly
And in this battle you couldn't get votes not even from Democracy
dumb and played 3/10
You need to take your ryhme book , feed it to the dumb rats
..............Cause Im getting tired of you and your stunt raps
Man I ripped and smoked this dude only thing left was a blunt wrap !
lol dope closer 8/10
overall 6/10 for havin some dope punches and flowin good
blunt wrap
fix your structure homie write your verses like this
Rippin Mc's Taking Dey Souls....
You Winning Gotta Betta Chance Seeing Micheal Wit A Real Nose...
cool opener 7/10
You Soft Trying Act Hard Now All Of Sudden...
Jerseys Finest Why Am I Battling Da Bootleg Version Of Joe Budden...
lol cool 6/10
I'm Winning And He Mad...
Nigga I'ma Give You So Much L's Dey Goin Put Ya Ass In A Rehab...
ok punch 6/10
Face It Nigga You Can't Spit...
And Ya Punches Like A Bad Baseball Player Cause Dey Can't Hit...
lol cool 6/10
Can't Rap So Try Cursing Ya Lines...
Nigga You Could Work At A Proffesional Hospital Wit Those Nursery Rhymes...(okay)
okay punch 5/10
Ya Closer's Okay But Wat A Bad Way To Start Of Shit..
You Wouldn't Win Even If I Gave You 4 Votes To Start Of Wit...(okay)
cool 6/10
You Losin Only Thing You Beating Is Ya Cock...
and Pursuit Dat Verse You Droped Make's Darkcide Look Like D-block...
lol dope 8/10
From Da 3 Point Line Is Da Only Time You Shoot...
Damn You Reach Gettin Ko Nowonder Ya Names Pursuit..
cool 6/10
overral 8/10
see how that helps you out alot and if you have explanations don't put them in your verse put them at the end of your verse
vote Blunt for throwin more hard punches
doesn't that verse that i put look better than this
Rippin Mc's Taking Dey Souls.... You Winning Gotta Betta Chance Seeing Micheal Wit A Real Nose... You Soft Trying Act Hard Now All Of Sudden... Jerseys Finest Why Am I Battling Da Bootleg Version Of Joe Budden... I'm Winning And He Mad... Nigga I'ma Give You So Much L's Dey Goin Put Ya Ass In A Rehab...(a Place Where Dey Put People Wit Drug Problems) Face It Nigga You Can't Spit... And Ya Punches Like A Bad Baseball Player Cause Dey Can't Hit... Can't Rap So Try Cursing Ya Lines... Nigga You Could Work At A Proffesional Hospital Wit Those Nursery Rhymes...(okay) Ya Closer's Okay But Wat A Bad Way To Start Of Shit... You Wouldn't Win Even If I Gave You 4 Votes To Start Of Wit...(okay) You Losin Only Thing You Beating Is Ya Cock...and Pursuit Dat Verse You Droped Make's Darkcide Look Like D-block...
From Da 3 Point Line Is Da Only Time You Shoot... Damn You Reach Gettin Ko Nowonder Ya Names Pursuit...(pursuit Means To Reach Something Or To Follow Something)
they the same thing except better structure
don no bout that..butOriginally Posted by the definition
Persuit-men nice verse, multies, anhard punches good job an da way of creativity 2 the ending was funny 2 both came hard as hell so this is hard thoe..
blutn-u had a good verse to overrall but i seen better frm u b 4 wa happened? but u came hard on the punches so u made up faq the structuer part but ima go wit a lil craativity an punches an i vote blunt fo da t very hard decsion 4 real both is real good v/blunt
aight peps thanks for the feed back ......keep em coming ! uppin
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Good Battle Pur Wanna Join My Crew And Can You Help Me Wit My Structure
Blunt wrap i got ur Pm
from last night u still down?
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