Nice piece right here...
Loving the concept you went with, you hardly see stuff like this written by guys because it's usually the girls who use these kind of topics. The emotion must be the best aspect of your piece because it was pure and serene yet powerful at the same time. The imagery was excellent, I could picture everything perfectly inside my mind throughout the wordings you used. The vocab was on point: not too basic, not too complex either. Had a sort of poetic vibe over it as well which I definitely liked!
Very good, keep at it...