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yaboyyoungmike
Camilo
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Checkin in man.........................................
Yeah boyy Im Back...
homeboy if you want it, you can get it//
scared for life, so you'll never forget it//
none of ya boys would, ever dare mention//
another boy schooled, and sent to dention//
study this homework, and take this hard lession//
high as fuck, aint no need to be stressin//
i shine like dimonds, high in the sky//
after i post this, ill him with no reply//
punches so hard, i just make him wanna cry//
the problems back, so whos the next guy//
You joined in February,but then decided to take a 6 month leave
Matter of fact just leave rb but just after this KO you about to recieve
Be specific on where you really from,theres no reason to keep it a secret
You probably did write where you from but then you decided to delete it?
What is this man,you post your verse and then log off are you leavin again?
Or you thought that your future in this battle was comin out to be uncertain
Since this is ur first battle in six months I'll be gladly to give a loss to ur rec.
You sayin u goin to win,but when you lose you'll realise that u wasn't correct
You've been here longer than me but still you're in noweight status
You're not in my level so go ahead and take this loss and take some practice
You joined in February,but then decided to take a 6 month leave
Matter of fact just leave rb but just after this KO you about to recieve
Be specific on where you really from,theres no reason to keep it a secret
You probably did write where you from but then you decided to delete it?
What is this man,you post your verse and then log off are you leavin again?
Or you thought that your future in this battle was comin out to be uncertain
Since this is ur first battle in six months I'll be gladly to give a loss to ur rec.
You sayin u goin to win,but when you lose you'll realise that u wasn't correct
You've been here longer than me but still you're in noweight status
You're not in my level so go ahead and take this loss and take some practice
good verse though man i aint gonna front............
uppin...............#1
boy
homeboy if you want it, you can get it//
scared for life, so you'll never forget it//
wack opener
none of ya boys would, ever dare mention//
another boy schooled, and sent to dention//
weak, need harder punches
study this homework, and take this hard lession//
high as fuck, aint no need to be stressin//
just a rhyme
i shine like dimonds, high in the sky//
after i post this, ill him with no reply//
ok
punches so hard, i just make him wanna cry//
the problems back, so whos the next guy//
weak ender
yo your verse needs better wording, all u gotta work on harder punches and personals if u wanna win battles. ur structure was a lil good and flow was iight, but u suck in vocabs. try to work on them stuff and ull be good 2 go.
D
You joined in February,but then decided to take a 6 month leave
Matter of fact just leave rb but just after this KO you about to recieve
iight opener, decent
Be specific on where you really from,theres no reason to keep it a secret
You probably did write where you from but then you decided to delete it?
nope, wack
What is this man,you post your verse and then log off are you leavin again?
Or you thought that your future in this battle was comin out to be uncertain
weak man,
Since this is ur first battle in six months I'll be gladly to give a loss to ur rec.
You sayin u goin to win,but when you lose you'll realise that u wasn't correct
too basic, need better punches
You've been here longer than me but still you're in noweight status
You're not in my level so go ahead and take this loss and take some practice
good ender, not bad
over all weak battle dough.D- your verse was kool, and you came more direct with your disse. i mean u was talkin about ur opponent through out ur whole verse, u just need some better punches, personals was good and u was creativie. and structure was better thats why u won
V/D
i mean camilo, i thought his name was with a D...........
homeboy if you want it, you can get it//
scared for life, so you'll never forget it//
wack
none of ya boys would, ever dare mention//
another boy schooled, and sent to dention//
wack
study this homework, and take this hard lession//
high as fuck, aint no need to be stressin//
wack
i shine like dimonds, high in the sky//
after i post this, ill him with no reply//
wack
punches so hard, i just make him wanna cry//
the problems back, so whos the next guy//
wack
v.s
everything...............
camilo u had good strucure personal's and good punches.........and bangen wordplay..............the other dude you have to elevate on everything
v/camilo
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uppin.....#2
uppin.................#3
Upin...................# 4 ................................
2-0 me.
up 4.
homeboy if you want it, you can get it//
scared for life, so you'll never forget it//
no
none of ya boys would, ever dare mention//
another boy schooled, and sent to dention//
could've worked with better set-up
study this homework, and take this hard lession//
high as fuck, aint no need to be stressin//
forced
i shine like dimonds, high in the sky//
huh?
after i post this, ill him with no reply//
punches so hard, i just make him wanna cry//
the problems back, so whos the next guy//
no punch
vs
You joined in February,but then decided to take a 6 month leave
Matter of fact just leave rb but just after this KO you about to recieve
eh
Be specific on where you really from,theres no reason to keep it a secret
You probably did write where you from but then you decided to delete it?
more of a statement
What is this man,you post your verse and then log off are you leavin again?
Or you thought that your future in this battle was comin out to be uncertain
similar to the opener
Since this is ur first battle in six months I'll be gladly to give a loss to ur rec.
You sayin u goin to win,but when you lose you'll realise that u wasn't correct
no
You've been here longer than me but still you're in noweight status
You're not in my level so go ahead and take this loss and take some practice
better wording in punchline would've helped
v/Camilo. There wasn't any creative punches used by Mike. Camilo stretched the same concept out for an entire verse. You saw that you didn't need it in thie battle, but with lines that long, internal rhyming can help. Camilo came after his opponent, and had more creativity.
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