The Poisoned Tree

**sILLable** · August 6th, 2005, 09:38 PM

first off...very dope drop....i loved tha imagery...tha emotion...tha story was ill.....very creative and original.....pretty much a flawless piece.

Originally Posted by DeniIll

angels would pick fruit, tragic for a twisted root
heaven's skies clouded red, which assisted to pollute

this was very dope to me...all ha lines stood out...but this one stood out tha most..to me...really dope concept

Originally Posted by DeniIll

The blast of the roaring sky opens Jesus’ eyes
To realize this frenzy was a nightmare and a twisted lie
Sweat falls from his pores, ponders on the evil image
Seeing the tree of heaven, now such a granted privilege
The apples crisp and red, the branches strong as steel
Angels slept with grace, the dream gaze wrong and unreal
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Peace on heaven is kept, no evil invasion to be…
And with a setting so calm, Jesus sleeps under the tree

the ending was by far tha illest part of this piece i think...and thats saying alot since this piece was so dope....all in all this piece was mad ill....keep droppin tha hottness.~1~

**Steven William** · August 6th, 2005, 10:01 PM

Den - Drop was nice man.. great job on the Imagery and the emotion you brought to this piece. Very very strong on the Imagery it was very easily picturable in my head along with the lyrics and the way it all meshed together along with strong emotion. The lyrics flowed great also man. Great Job.

Drop a reply on my
Shit On-Word and/or Mid-Nightmare Heist.

chea

-Syn

**Eyedentity.** · August 7th, 2005, 06:02 PM

Meh. i thought this was alright.

you need to work on vocab, and flow was off in a few spots. strucutre wise it could have been better. all i can say is elevate cause overall all this was shit.