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    Locked In The Chamber

    [ Locked in the Chamber ]

    Im locked in the chamber
    Anxiously waitin to make one suffer
    After I depart my chamber
    This mechanical piece'l dispense in another member
    Finally my anxiety's calmed by the chambers only light
    Or maybe it's better for me to escape this darker place at night
    Eager to let loose and take course in natures air
    I wonder what will I destroy to cause unexpected dispair
    But those thoughts have no meaning. . . Why?
    Because Im still locked in the Chamber.

    Early September, my master confronted a gang member
    Fueled with rage he dropped his blunt, exposin it's glowin ember
    Don't you remember master, that's the person you sent Caliber After
    Under your high, your prominent death became inflicted with laughter
    As I felt my faith suddenly becomin a factor
    Mechanically I heared a click drivin my insanity faster
    Urgent, I flew through what seemed to be reality
    I couldn't stop, as I was reedeemin blood for my thirsty.

    Could it be my purpose was to increase deaths statistical casualty?
    Or was I here to test mans fait through their family?.

    Noticably, I took flight towards the side walks pre-damaged concrete
    As I cashed I flew again, feelin the sound of a weakened heart-beat..
    Master you shall forgive me, as your high impared your vision
    And caused your aim to de-tour me and cause your chest's incision.
    Under my body the doctor will find my description
    And discover that my chambers the murder weapon and it's still missin.

    But this doesn't mean that this chapter is over, cause a new member just took my place, now. . .

    Locked In The Chamber.


    (Note: One of my old pieces re-written.)

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    rhymed real nicely straight shit

    stay consistent

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    yeah this did rhyme nic i personally liked this good job
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    ^^ uppin ^^ thnx fuh da feed

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    im likin this, ALOT. rhymed nicely, and im lovin the end. short & simple.

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    Quote Originally Posted by SIMPLEsweet
    im likin this, ALOT. rhymed nicely, and im lovin the end. short & simple.
    Thanks, uppin ^^

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    uppididdywkiddyweedysmoeyweed!

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    good job......i liked it....nicely done

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