Rap Vs Love (Chapter-One)

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My First Child In Life, And I'm Switching My Paste
Momma Tripping And My Bro Bitching In My Face
Eighteen Years Old......And I'm Choosing My Prime
I Don't Try My Best So Am I Really Losing My Mind
And I'm A Daddy So It's Kind Of Hard Raising A Kid
Damn I Keep Getting Drunk And Still Blazing Up Shit
I'm Out Of Choices, And I'm Running Low On Options
I Love Her, But I Feel Like Running Her For Adoption
I Got A Heart Feeling.. That I'll Be A Bum On The Ride
Girl Is My Life, Even Though...I Got One On The Side
And Counseling Won't Work Cause I'm Hurting Inside
Got This Feeling In My Gut And It's Merking My Pride
All I Know Is I Got To Make It.. For My Family's Sake
And I Won't Stop Rapping Till They Handing Me Cake
I Know I've Got Talent.. But My Girl Won't Support It
Trying To Giving Her Everything But I Can't Afford It
I'm Passing Opportunities Like Crazy And I Can't See
And I Know If I Make A Mistake I'll Be Out Camping
Cause My Girl Got A Problem With Me And My Music
And I Won't Yell At Her But Please Don't Confuse It
Up Late Writing, When She Asks, I'm Mixing My Lies
My Excuse Twisting The Truth I'm Still Fixing My Ties
If Rap Was Raising A Kid, It Won't Be Worth My While
So It's Time For Me To Start Working With My Child


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Thanks Man Good looking Out

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Bumping This Shits

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Bumping THis Shits Man

[T.r.oo.P]

Hot Deep shit

Look out 4 that Chapter 2 Coming Soon

Ft...YourS Truely...

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Chep Chep My Nigga

[WhiteNoise]

yee i was really likin this vocab was good, rhymes were good, the topic you chose was good you reflected it well, the flow was also good...overall i liked this piece.....keep spittin.....

[B.]

nice man, i think that you really used vocab to connect with the reader and you made them feel what dude was feelin, real nice man

*claps till hands fall off*

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Thanks Man Thanks

[Jawn Raw]

damn im really feeling this one i can see cennections of multiples but not quite complete some were there but some werent connecting ya feel me, anyway the imagery was very good, damn man so much shit happened to you since we talked last but really i like this piece a lot better then the 2nd one. flow is good i can really see this workin on a beat, so yea go ahead record this ish man its tight.

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remember feed on my love letter and white flag

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[FLYEST NIGGA EVA]

I could put my place in ya shoez fa a minute its great vocab you explained the story well...and def. nice imagery!!!! you now goin back and forth with raising ya child or emcee'ing its just all around good work a great story line i can see where yo comin from.....stay up and if ya see a post of mine gimme some feed back thnx keep doin ya thang thang......

[FLYEST NIGGA EVA]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=209017

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I Got You Dawg............Thanks.......

[Ace the Prophet]

yeah man, real nice piece. like what dudes up there have said, it had nice imagery to it. i liked ya rhymin skills in it. not half assed like im seein from most cats...on some of your lines i felt like they coulda been re-worded to make them better. like, some felt like they were part of the story, but they sounded kinda filler...like this:

I'm Passing Opportunities Like Crazy And I Can't See
And I Know If I Make A Mistake I'll Be Out Camping

like...i think if you said this in a different way it woulda been hotter...

but hey man, it's no doubt a nice piece. just keep elevatin. peace