Topical: StonedGrace vs. ab0ve (GOD)

[Brandon Cee]

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House Rules!

[stonedgrace]

this is my check............................................. ............................

[Brandon Cee]

check....1 hour to drop from now

[Brandon Cee]

Have you ever wondered what it truly means to be blessed?...
Because of us Jesus was killed...and put to heavenly rest...
I getting so angry when I hear stories that mock my God...
He is the begining and end....and I know he is not a fraud...
Being born was something...that I cherish, but still regret...
Because my conscience makes me blame myself for his death...
Without my Lord.....I am and will always be a total nothing...
Jesus took my cocoon....and turned me into something...
Life's short...live it for and with Him because death is eventual...
God will take you in and make you feel like you are special...
Cheers be to the Lord up above for he has cleansed my heart...
Should've come to God earlier...cuz now people have a head start...
God is my reason for life and also my reason for wanting death...
He gives every necessity we need....including every last breath..
The tortures of the earth will now be soon taken away...regressed...
I wanna go to Heaven...so I can know what it truly means to be blessed!

My First Topcial

[stonedgrace]

GOD:

all-knowing, bestowing knowledge upon mankind
keeps the rivers flowing, but causes droughts at the same time
balance of life and death, but the devil tips the scales
with so many paths to step, which is the heavenly trail
i guess only time will tell, but i kno ill never fail
as long as he is the wind behind my sails
divine intervention, protects those who take leaps of faith
trace the footsteps in the sand, im just trying to keep pace
good and evil walk side by side, the dividing line stay blurry
the devils temptation is hard to hide, satans trying to lure-me
and the justice system their the ones lyin, its plain perjury
cuz only he can judge me, so fuck the grand jury
i kno when my destiny's fulfilled i wont have to worry
cuz its clear he'll have a spot already there for me
and as far as my so-called crimes, they have no relevance
cuz God forgives all, as long as they show repentance

[Brandon Cee]

nice vote up

[HighClass]

Above - I thought the verse was decent. It was a pretty predictable way of looking at the topic. Which most of the time is alright, but you gotta pull it off stronger. There were alot of points you made that I agreed with, but being a topical battle, you gotta come stronger... You feel me? It was decent, but ive seen better from you. Even though this was your first topical battle...

Stonedgrace - Your verse was pretty predictable as well, but you came stronger in the sense of getting the point across. It was a nice little flow until about the 6th bar I think you fell of a little. But you recovered nice. I liked what you said in it, just like above I agreed for the most part...

Vote - Stonedgrace

conclusion - me personaly, I felt he came stronger with the topic and basically forced me to get into it with a couple lines while reading it. Other than that they wernt to much different from each other... g/l to both of you...

( plz check the battle out in my sig, and make an honest vote. It would be much appriciated... Its also a topical... )

[HighClass]

ahhh shit, man I hate startin new names... my bad its that 100 posts bullshit that wont let me vote... So I guess I will just have to up this for yall... my bad, lol...

UPPIN

[killamicheck]

both of them were hot i was feelin ab0ves a little more because i got kinda confused with stoneds so

v/ab0ve

[maxilion]

Above: It had a good story to it but I could tell where it was leading to. I liked it but at the end it kind of fell off.

Stonedgrace: You had strong words in your verse that got through to me. Overall you just came stronger and I liked it better.

V/ SG

Vote for my battle in my sig since I took time for you.

[stonedgrace]

uppin .................................................. 1

[sILLable]

Above-- I thought his verse was tight....i liked tha multis and vocab used.....i think you had more emotion in your verse....it was consistent...and it had some complexity....kida poetic but still flowed well...i liked your rhyme scheme as well....structure was tight.

stonedgrace-- i liked your verse too....it had some complexity..not as much as Aboves verse.....i liked your rhyme scheme and your structure was good too.....i felt your verse had emotion but not quite as much as Aboves verse.....your vocab was aiight but it could have been better......it flowed well and your bars werent stretched....all in all not a bad verse.

VOTE--Above

[Silas]

Nice Piece.


ab0ve-This was very splendid piece for your first topical....i mean you came really good for you'r first man very nice creatvity.....structure was fine...you'r vocabualry was excellent man....metaphors was eh....but still you came very ILL and that's what i loved...nice emotion piece...and most importantly talking about our god is great...Fantastic job...


StonedGrace-You'r verse was fine too man.....but for some reason i wasn't feeling your's as much as i felt ab0ve's verse....because your's just wasn't as soothing as his your's was just like ruff for me to read and although you had good structure so plus for that...but you just lacked in some places sorry man.....


V/ab0ve..


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[YoungHusla]

Above-man u killed this shit..you was tite as all hell. Your creativity was bomb and so was ur flow.

Stonedgrace-Man you was ight...not bad dawg...work on your flow a lil more and word play/Strusture.

v/above

[Tiresias]

wow this was mad good on both parts but im going to have to go with stonedgrace even though this is a mad hard dicision