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  1. July 14th, 2005, 03:30 PM #1
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    ~My Affection~

    .....my lady who i love and adore.....
    ....more than most can contimplate for sure....
    ....affections infected my blood stream....
    ....shes lovely and she loves me,so shes loving....
    ....kissing and hugging turns to passion....
    ....somethin more than smashin,or just action....
    ....sex we share,hexed her stare,noone compares....
    ....cant imagine where i would be with out....
    ....my girl and all her "know i love you no doubt".....
    ....weve raised above,praised our love,no more cocaine....
    ....no more feelin drained,instill no pain no steel in veins....
    ....released my demons and she released her shit....
    ....we triumphed over problems yet were far from perfect....
    .past dillemas,i cast my sentence,gave up sinnin,it was worth it.


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  2. July 15th, 2005, 12:11 PM #2
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    K. Alright I liked this. Had emotion, I could felt what you was saying betwen your words. The imagery should be upp a little, but was ok. I say put some metaphors in your poems next time. The best aspect in this piece was the emotion keep it up.

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  3. July 15th, 2005, 12:26 PM #3
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    thanks girl....i appreciate it.~1~


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  4. July 23rd, 2005, 03:58 AM #4
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    chyeaa. dangg im hekka likin this. i feel wuh ur sayin. =] nice drop. love it, keep em comin & ill keep readin =]

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  5. July 24th, 2005, 09:43 PM #5
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    thanks girl....need more replies.


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  6. July 25th, 2005, 01:19 AM #6
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    Sweet poem. I however felt it needed more creativity/ imagination to bring the " love" vibe so to speak pouring out more. But none the less nice sweet poem.
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  7. July 25th, 2005, 03:55 PM #7
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    i appreciate it...htnks for tha replies.~1~


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