Arms of the Angels..(heavens entrance)

[Awdo Grafh.]

Arms of the Angels
Heavens Entrance

the soft bliss, glistens a poched kiss hailing above
realeasing white doves,hencing the caring love
clovers deem the water lillys of life and Heaven
new visits at holy offices seek, im Sent in
the sacred statues i stare and pervail the scenery
with solum souls of clay resembling god like serenity
the soul approaches arc angels, hes tuned in
noticing past ruthless crimes, dailied a ruined sin
hailed meeting in heaven intoroduces the free man
whos lifes impacted illusioned waves without a catamaran
New beggining phases occur, whiplashing my head
no past thoughts on living,excluding rest in my bed
the mans covered in new meanings, Lifes gazing gleamings
examinations with holy angels expose lifes new seeings
surpassing the office, he peeks at walls which leak....
gods holy water, for cleansing with a fresh reak

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The heavens core

entering core of heaven, struck with a simple blessing
daily routines of hassels end, future seeks the resting
examining the floor boards, streched in golden marble
with nothing that shines brighter, not even a star will
deep breaths gasp, he takes a seat and weep in tears
not for happiness, but for sad, knowing the end is near
almost there, confident and absolute for trying
weaping crys stop, and engages in a quick sighing
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Angels Peak

the paralized pupil tweaks the mind, as he stares
thoughts of ignorance, but knowing that lifes fair
light abright shines in his retina, aimlessly he leaves
and quickly confronts arc angels, hes in dis belief
he kisses the holy character, and rinses his face
as its covered in dirty lies, and fallen lifes case
always will i remember this day, gods sake until..
i awake in a long sleep, covored in the arms of the angel

[Awdo Grafh.]

Uppin.....

[Awdo Grafh.]

wtf............Jesus peeps be sleepin on kost.

[Dan Dare]

You need to get two links, to two OMs you left decent feedback on, or this gets closed, thanks.

[Awdo Grafh.]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...31#post2474631
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=196711

There ya go Jek

[CrazyCarl]

I liked this. Each verse started out with nice rhyming, which works to get the reader's attention. I felt the first one was the most descriptive, creating the image of the entrance. The second verse put some emotion into the piece, and set up the ending. Structure was nice, and a creative topic.

[Dan Dare]

I've deleted some of your posts, since you don't need to up a piece every half an hour.. they're basically freeposts.

Anyway.. this was a good drop.. very poetic, definitely nicely worded throughout, with some intriguing imagery. You obviously have some experience, nice solid rhyme schemes as well. Not seen your work before, but this was a fairly impressive drop.

[Awdo Grafh.]

Thank you very much Jek.

Up.

[Awdo Grafh.]

Up.

[Rezen]

I definatly liked this piece, very poetic writing style that you've got, which i definatly prefer,
Soft words where used to potray the story and the structure was solid
you did a good job, its a nice topic aswell.
I personally havent witnessed any of your work before, and im impressed.
Keep it up son.

[Andrew..]

Straight peice here. Good flow through out. This was a nice topic. I liked the way it was strcutured. It was poetic and the best feature of this peice had to be the imagery. Keep at it.


- Wise

[Vicious Breed]

Havent seen anyhting form u before and i have to say im pretty amazed
You had amazing flow vocab and structure
You used the right words at the right time and ur writing style is good for this topic
I have to sya ur poetic style of wirting helped with the topic and the vocab to make a altogther good piece

[Violent.]

A nice peice, Your definiatly getting better, Your opening lines was dope at grabbing the readers attention, Your structure was also amazing, The way you set out the peice into 3 distinct sections.
Your multis were also amazing, Simply becuase they wernt off a basic rhyming scheme, that gave great effect to the reader.
A dope ending also, consisting of the title in the final line.

A dope peice, that worthy of OM Hall Of Fame. Ill nominate this

Hit UP Me ANd Deviate Collab
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=197248

[Judge Judy]

Thanks, i will check that out.

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[KªL¡]

I do agree here,
very good topic kost... I liked the whole thing from beginning to end.
I was feeling ya structure and also the 3 different sceneries, to give off an even more imaged read. I was feeling the twists, and concepts you used as well as wordplay, vocab, your internals were really good, from when i started reading the opening line just caught my attention, well the title did it, but to get more into it, wow.... Homie yea, i never seen much of your work but shit yea you definitely got skills and know what your doin...I cant really point out a specific line(s) i like b/c i was enthralled completely. keep droppn homie, cant wait to see & read more from you.........

Definitelt a piece worth NOMINATING HOF