10 lines
you spit first
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ghost805
~G~
10 lines
you spit first
due in 30 min after checkin
read what I spit/I aint blood or crip/don't trip
imma mexican with a full clip/all i need is a beat to rip/
as i twist/ this sticky green herb in my fist/
i keep it gangsta and ghetto/u aint on my level/imma boulder yous a pebble
im as hot as a tea kettle/got this nine and this rhyme aimed at your temple/
its simple/u get popped like pimples/leaving your body full of dimples/
i bring the pain like Meth/take a deep breath/ cuz i aint even started yet
u see fools like u get hurt/when i put in work/
end up 6 feet deep under the dirt/imma captain like kirk/
im shady like eminem/u jus a square like spongebob and the rest of dem
You never checked oh well.
I don't know where you got that....wacked as hell not a verse
First step to your win.... you gotta practice and rehurse
You ILL i think you need help with your spit maybe a damn nurse
Or else you battle ends up like all boo's from the crowd,you cursed
I bet if i took that and put it on my site ill have no one there anymore
Cause it will look so ugly and damn wacked...It won't look like Mandy Moore
This verse kills yours for sure ill leave mine with a win and with a score
Claimin your cool oooo your name is ghost, that ain't no rb name
Fuck you so wack everyone probablly surprised i showed up...your lame
This battle is a disgrace , thought you would be better what a shame....
uppin1
i say thug life won this...
first off ghost, restructurize ya verse to a more readable format. then learn and elevate with some word play, because i say a bunch o filllers in your verse, make sure you direct punchlinre towards your opponents.... nothing really stuck out to me, and it just wasnt creative for me. elevate, try again pz......
thug life pretty good verse, pretty good punches, a few fillers here and there, and a line or two seemed sorta stretched but overall came out to be the stronger verse in this battle, good shit homie, pz......
vote/------- thug life..
Explained why already....
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I Would Have To Say That Thug Life Won This One He Came Harder
Reason
Better Flow
Stlye
Structer
An Originality Was Nice
Rtf Vote Fairly
No Hate
uupiin
G took this hes really commin up, his punches hit him in the right places
ghost all i gotta say to u is elavate and ur ryhmes would be tight v/G
Structure: Thug
PunchesL: Thug
Personals: Thug
Openor: None
Flow: Thug
Originality: Thug
Enjoyed: None
Overall: Thug
v//Thug
Overall weak battle but i give this on to Thug, he came harder and had better punchlines even though some aint hit hard... Keep it up and elevate..As for ghost dont end // with those or put them in the middle of your sentence/ it makes it look sloppy ..and learn to make punchlines
ight ghost homie sort ya structure out dawg...need a more readable formate its hard to follow nahm sayin? secondly u need use more wordplay n make ur punches hella lot more harder homies they aint hittin plus ur verse it just filler anyyway...you got alotta elevatin to do ight..no hate just work on ur shit...and cut out the // its wack as fuck...ight now ~G~ good verse homie some good punches however 2 lines seemed a lil forced but other than that good verse ight keep that shit up ight..ima go with ~G~ for an overall better verse and harder punches...
v/~G~
uupiin-3
Structure: Thug
PunchesL: Thug
Personals: Thug
Flow: Thug
Originality: Thug
Enjoyed: Both
closer: Thug
Openor: Thug
lol Thug murked him you on the real thug won for just a better verse
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