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    When The World Fell Silent.

    this world,
    if it fell silent...
    we'd die.
    simple as that.
    no exagerations.
    no hesitations.
    no one listens.

    i hate realizations,
    being awake and lieing myself to sleep.
    dreaming confessions.
    especially those that just lead
    to more questions
    for the questions i can't even ask.
    reality is naked, so we look away.
    hands to face, embarresed by delusions.
    we're used to looking for answers
    that just breed confusion.

    we watch tv hoping to become
    the next terry schiavo. are you
    alive, numb or just another number?
    we feed on drama like fish out of water;
    shot in barrels, bought in hand-fulls.
    we make martyrs out of monkeys,
    fathers out of junkies
    and authors out of flunkies.
    if i could view your beliefs...
    i'd see right through you
    but dont listen to me.
    if i want to be heard,
    i'll just speak over you.

    thats how its done isn't it?
    pile the noise untill we're all deaf.
    well atleast then, i suppose we can say
    whatever we want. so take a deep breath.
    live outloud. die outspoken.
    use your outside voices, please.
    keep nothing inside. hide silence.
    talk all you want so nonstop noise
    reverberates the places you frequent.
    replace all you've seen, heard,
    or read about with all you're being.
    perception doesn't equal reality..
    it rivals your dreams.
    escape all reason.

    be a "treason to the patriot act"
    be against the war.
    be ignorant to the thousands of lives
    living by the death of one soldier.
    be american culture.
    be a non-bush, no party supporter.
    be warned, this world has horns.
    be hers, a slave-labored lover
    be awake, sleep with strangers.
    be a bedpost; pirched like a vulture
    but be warned, your head has horns.
    and if your concerned with being heard
    then be careful to choose the right words
    because I won't be listening.

    if your pen is missing,
    write this in the sands of time.
    inscribe it in the oldest tree.
    paint it within the darkest cave.
    spell this out with stones in the lowest valleys,
    so mountains can look down-stream and read.
    wash your fingerprints in the river and
    cover the sky with white sheets of paper.
    muffle your mouth in your hands.
    draw under the moonlight tonight,
    untill your eyes are dry and dull.
    make this earth your journal.
    so when the world falls silent.
    and all minds are averted
    we'll have scribed voices
    into the calls of the wind;
    find a universal dialogue
    hiding outside the heart
    and begin again.
    Last edited by Moniker; May 24th, 2005 at 12:53 AM
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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    You need to get two links, to two OMs you left decent feedback on, or this gets closed, thanks.
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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    You always have some nice pieces. Good job here, dope stuff i enjoyed reading this. Nice imagery, just like your poetry.

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    this was tight,good imagery,nice multis,piece was layed out very well,keep droppin tha hottness.~1~


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    Another very strong piece here. Very real message. Amazing depth of rhyming; complex, and yet, straight to the point. Very impressive rhyme schemes too, I had one or two issues with syllable count, just from time to time, but I'm sure it's just me. Nice job on this though. And get that other link soon my man, or I'll have to close. Peace.
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    dope piece
    some ill lines in there
    and the verse seemed to meld together and continue without breaking up the subject or content
    the verse was very much poetical..would be quite hard to audiolise this
    best piece i've seen on here in a year
    maybe swing by for some more indepth feed wit quotes later
    props

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    it's a bold statement - the new youtube

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    You're probably the best poet on this site, no lie. We need to collab again soon. Oh. . .the dopeness.
    can I kick it?

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    thanks to all who've replied.

    spoken, we'll collab soon.
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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
    abstanticollective.

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    not the best shit ive seen but its alright 6/10

    Just increas the tempo and the vocab a lil more and u got it.

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    of everything existing.
    Po'ethics
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