criminal intent

[malodrin]

i got a criminal intent
cant get rid of the shit
all i ever think about is murderin
even at my job i flip burgers and think about stabbin a bitch then stabbin her again and again
maybe this is why i have no friends
cause all i try to do is kill em'
probaly the same reason i got no girlfriend
cause i cant be a normal freak and wanna fuckher with a bowlin pin
i'd rather whip out my switchblade and make it tickle her clit
but that criminal intent kicks in and i start stabbin the shit
even when i walk down the boulavard tryin to be bad and act all hard
criminal intent makes me wanna start some shit
with some lady i walk by and say what an ugly baby mind if i kill it put it out of its myzery so it doesnt grow up to be someone like me
i got a criminal intent what can i say i like to leave blood splattered all over the place

[verbal suicide]

it aint all that good you need to work on some massive shit are you a newb at rappn?

[Trema]

this was very weak talking about you wanna stab your friends and shit, homie you need help! This kinda flow dont amaze me at all! You need to work on your structure and your rhymes if you want to sound better!

[Toilet Cookie]

Hmmm.....you really need to work on expanding your vocabulary if you're going to just do a monosyllabic rhyme scheme the whole way through to make your verse more interesting. The subject matter is tired as well. If you want to rap horrrocore style try listening to shit like Q-Strange to see the kinds of topics he comes up with. Horrorcore doesn't have to be so random.

[Dan Dare]

You need to get two links to two OMs that you left solid feedback on, or this will be closed, thanks.

[Brooklyn Bob]

this piece was wack man...
topic: played 3/10
flow: hard to follow at times 5/10
punch lines: dont think there was any 0/10
vocab: very poor, if u need thesaurus a that bad go to microsoft word 4/10

all up: 4/10

u need some work, there's alot of room for improvement...i sudjest u take some time to write your verses, this seemed very rushed