Shedding Tears

[Jawn Raw]

Shedding Tears
Crying daily her frustration grew tell it hit a mountains Peek
Temptation never expected, restricted for someone so Unique
The moment I met her, she patronized of a life Unorganized
Hit with drug abuse and alcohol addictions never Recognized
Never with friends, they all banded her without a Remark
She was always full of temptation she just couldn’t Embark
Always frustrated, yet she was possessed with a Disease
People would gossip saying she got aids just to be a Tease
But nobody knew if it was the truth so many asked Questions
Under the impression of depression, they forced her Aggressions
Always coming to places drunk or high, people would doubt Her
Then she’d go home, cry because of people asking about Her
The sadness was no one knew her feelings weren’t her Motivation
Frustration wasn’t the expectation, but she needed a Vacation
The only left for her to do was wish for a life with less of Hate
Even though life consists on fate, love just doesn’t Relate
Crying daily her frustration grew tell it hit a mountains Peek
Temptation never expected, restricted for someone so Unique

[Jawn Raw]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...69#post2435069
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...75#post2435075

[(BLACK DIAMOND)]

Man This Is Good I Like It Alot
It Flowed Made Since And Was A Good Story
Come Look At Mine I Need Pointers
Nice Work
Getto Life By Black Diamond

[Jawn Raw]

thanks a lot but leave me a link i cant find it.
uppin

[(BLACK DIAMOND)]

Its On This Page Its Called Getto Life I Dont Know How To Set Up A Link
Getto Life

[Jawn Raw]

idk ill try man.

uppin for feed dont post again please.

[Frontrunner]

yea son this was a good drop...it flowed seemlessly an the story is written nicely...good imagery..I could really follow your story...I liked the message begind it as well...it had good vocab, solid structure....this was def. a good read....keep it up son.....I'll holla one

[Jawn Raw]

thanks a lot man i really appreciate that man.

uppin

[Spoken Deity]

re..this shit was dope... very fucking good

even though i know you aint in the ghetto, you could really dont show it
you spat a hard verse with lots of pretty good imagry.... it seemes like one of those natural verses you get...the flow and structure is very good... great shit man...

hit my open mic plz

[¤ÐÅž¤]

lol, hey para, way to elevate on ya topicals man.....
overall it was decent wasnt feeling the multi's crammed
in there but it still worked out fine.....
some real solid bars in this piece with some true meaning behind them..

[Jawn Raw]

thanks a lot Daz, and LG i'll hit ya OM later tonight after school and yo LG just because im not from a rank ghetto doesnt mean i cant write a story abotu a troubled women. because i said nothing about being from the ghetto for all you know it could be true and it could be a gurl i know. but its not true lol.

uppin

[Abort]

I rip the mike just like i left u on ice
dont try spit back or you'll get hit back!!!!!!

[Abort]

i now u shed tears so stop crying and come to daddy i will put u to sleep with some magical dust!!!!!

[Jawn Raw]

um that was wack. i'd merk you even text
but i hate text

[Jawn Raw]

but yea uppin....