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[Mag...]

a few things... i thought the flow was on for a lot of it, though there were a few points where it just didn't come off

like, im getting the distinct impression that you kinda just rambled this out for the most part and kudos on getting it down mostly correct

i sense you're trying to head somewhere deep with your metaphors and whatnot... but no general underlying togetherness is present, Consequently i only kinda get what your talking about...

pretty darn good for a keystyle... but you could have crafted something better im sure

[Edicius]

nah, the flow is solid .. what are you on about?

i only kinda get what your talking about...''''

^you said that .. .. how can u break down something you dont get ..?
nuff said.

thanks for the reply.

[Incineratedrose]

Alright, yes it was very good for a keystyle, i thought the flow was on target and solid. Really good job, but dont get mad at Mag, he just didnt grasp it... hes cool!

Anyway, i thought the concept was golden i really liked the ending also, and as BTK said i very much agree "very complex" i really thought it was well done, but i like your actually ones that you take time to do better, which makes sense because they come out more polished but this was a good read.

[Mag...]

you asked me to respond... and i don't pretend i like anything

[Jawn Raw]

you have a weird stucture and rhyme scheme but i can still follow with it cause you use good multiples and vocabulary a nice peice ive seen better from you but i was feeling this. nice deep peice here. good imagery. really feeling this.

rtf on my OM SS verse Puppy Love link will be in my sig soon