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my name stands heavy globally cuz i sat-a-light//
I'll flood hell's gates with an army of darkness-
so i can "awe some" with "awe Dios"! oh God my rawness-
was my post really 24 mins ago anyways my verse
tryin to battle me to get ya name out, meh
this fag couldn't have a 'shot at fame' if he walked around "hollywood wit a gun"//
ur punches dont hit me cuz ur "aim's off" like cigarrette ad's targetin nuns//
'lyrical disciple must be pussy' cuz he aint got the 'balls to win'//
call lyrical lucifer cuz after one shot he's sure to fall like sin//
n i'll drop him like fat black ppl chicken, u know he's a foo//
cuz my rhymes are like "diplomat records", "too many juels"//
the way my punches hit disciple aint takin it well like bad pregnancy tests//
u suck son, even if u "put dogs in a pound" u still couldn't "pass as a vet"//
wanna talk tough? try n fuck wit me
"i crush emcees" but disciple's like fat ppl, he couldn't even "break a sweat"//
the way i rape ppl on stage kats call me michael jackson cuz who know's who "i'll leave fucked next"//
i come from a rough set that'll slice ya throat to give a new meanin to the word "red neck"//
u aint competition but ima treat ur 'verse like pussy' since it aint been "red yet"//[he a virgin n ima rape him]
my name stands heavy globally cuz i sat-a-light//
I'll flood hell's gates with an army of darkness-
so i can "awe some" with "awe Dios"! oh God my rawness-
Give me a true challenge with out the d/r votes//
I see some sad stories but ??? takes it to the throat//
All on dick like it’s the relief to your stress and all//
You’ll soon get dropped like them late night sprint calls//
Im battling a ??? hes just a noob//
Send this girl a few punches to the left boob//
We all kno he’ll never make the elite list//
Hit this wack ass bum wit a weak punch n still make him breathe less//
U r a fat slob, grease up potato chip…at the bottom of the bag//
U r not worth callin a homosexual they just slap u wit the fag//
iight thats wuts up ok now we just need some votes in here )good battle(
uppin #2Originally Posted by LyricalDisciple
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my name stands heavy globally cuz i sat-a-light//
I'll flood hell's gates with an army of darkness-
so i can "awe some" with "awe Dios"! oh God my rawness-
Murderin Meta4's
this fag couldn't have a 'shot at fame' if he walked around "hollywood wit a gun"//
ur punches dont hit me cuz ur "aim's off" like cigarrette ad's targetin nuns//
^opener was good, 2nd line a bit meh but didnt do bad....
'lyrical disciple must be pussy' cuz he aint got the 'balls to win'//
call lyrical lucifer cuz after one shot he's sure to fall like sin//
^no. first line, played.... and 2nd line, i seen where u were goin and what u were tryin to do - but it never worked for me...
n i'll drop him like fat black ppl chicken, u know he's a foo//
cuz my rhymes are like "diplomat records", "too many juels"//
^first line, filler, not that gud... 2nd line, not bad, but self glory so no.
the way my punches hit disciple aint takin it well like bad pregnancy tests//
u suck son, even if u "put dogs in a pound" u still couldn't "pass as a vet"//
^no. both were off target... and seen.
wanna talk tough? try n fuck wit me
"i crush emcees" but disciple's like fat ppl, he couldn't even "break a sweat"//
^lost ya structure, bad idea...
the way i rape ppl on stage kats call me michael jackson cuz who know's who "i'll leave fucked next"//
^huh?, it rhymed... bout it.
i come from a rough set that'll slice ya throat to give a new meanin to the word "red neck"//
^played. my lil bro sent a death threat to my best friend with that included. and hes 9.
u aint competition but ima treat ur 'verse like pussy' since it aint been "red yet"//[he a virgin n ima rape him]
^i cud see the concept - played as it is... but i didnt like it as a finisher... it wud have been better without the explanation coz then i wudnt be questioning your mental and sexual preferences...
work on ya structure and personals, ya punches were in - you can still elevate on them tho, but mainly ya personals were lacking. RTF.
LyricalDisciple
Give me a true challenge with out the d/r votes//
I see some sad stories but ??? takes it to the throat//
^wat the fuck? work on that 1 son..
All on dick like it’s the relief to your stress and all//
You’ll soon get dropped like them late night sprint calls//
^no.
Im battling a ??? hes just a noob//
Send this girl a few punches to the left boob//
^............ wats with ???.........? and no.
We all kno he’ll never make the elite list//
Hit this wack ass bum wit a weak punch n still make him breathe less//
^no. lol. see wat you tried to do, and you shudnt try to do it again by all acounts.
U r a fat slob, grease up potato chip…at the bottom of the bag//
U r not worth callin a homosexual they just slap u wit the fag//
^shit finisher, you need to understand the concept of rhymeschemes, and personals, and punches, and R..A..P..P..I..N..G.
your a lyrical peice of ass.
v/Murderin Meta4's
both elevate...
RTF please, if i see votes with links ill follow it and vote fairly yall...
Give me a true challenge with out the d/r votes//
I see some sad stories but ??? takes it to the throat//
All on dick like it’s the relief to your stress and all//
You’ll soon get dropped like them late night sprint calls//
Im battling a ??? hes just a noob//
Send this girl a few punches to the left boob//
We all kno he’ll never make the elite list//
Hit this wack ass bum wit a weak punch n still make him breathe less//
U r a fat slob, grease up potato chip…at the bottom of the bag//
U r not worth callin a homosexual they just slap u wit the fag//
^^^^this was tight........nice punch and person...
this fag couldn't have a 'shot at fame' if he walked around "hollywood wit a gun"//
ur punches dont hit me cuz ur "aim's off" like cigarrette ad's targetin nuns//
'lyrical disciple must be pussy' cuz he aint got the 'balls to win'//
call lyrical lucifer cuz after one shot he's sure to fall like sin//
n i'll drop him like fat black ppl chicken, u know he's a foo//
cuz my rhymes are like "diplomat records", "too many juels"//
the way my punches hit disciple aint takin it well like bad pregnancy tests//
u suck son, even if u "put dogs in a pound" u still couldn't "pass as a vet"//
wanna talk tough? try n fuck wit me
"i crush emcees" but disciple's like fat ppl, he couldn't even "break a sweat"//
the way i rape ppl on stage kats call me michael jackson cuz who know's who "i'll leave fucked next"//
i come from a rough set that'll slice ya throat to give a new meanin to the word "red neck"//
u aint competition but ima treat ur 'verse like pussy' since it aint been "red yet"//[he a virgin n ima rape him]
^^^^^this guys verse was good to.....not as good with punches though........
v/lyrical disc. for comin harder, better struc, and better overall flow and verse...
Hit me up for a collab!
uppin #3 last one help me out wit this plzzzzzz need some more votes to close it
Meta4's breakdown
flow:7
meta's:7
skill:7
originality:8
punches:8.5
Subject matter:8
L.D's break down
flow:7
metas:3
skill:3
originality:4
punches:4
subect matter:4
vote:Meta4....
goodjob both.theres potential here
return the favor.go vote on one of my battles in my sig
and give a good breakdown like i did...thx
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V/lyrical Disciple
Strong Puch Lines Stylll Good Battle To
Lyrics Disciple Jus Had A Little More.
v/ lyrical deciple cuz he came harder hit harder better structure and wordplay good shit return the favor
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