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    The Fountain Of Youth

    Just a Lighthouse in the fog trodden land is broke in the clouds…
    The ghosts of the lamppost tend to open their mouth…
    Cloud formations float and mold into verse…
    The fog lifts and tumbleweeds roll in reversed…
    Role is reversed, felt the becoming, uncouth…
    A tear drop, I fear not of the fountain of youth…
    Arrive draped in darkness, grasping the past’s Grail…
    This is the one time that I could shed the Black Veil…
    Breathe on my chest till the goose bumps form…
    Sleep and rest in the fountain where the truth’s so warm…
    The Lighthouse of Death illuminates the horizon…
    On Sundays I arrive at the mountain and rejuvenate the Sirens…
    Just for the company, purposely, I meant though-
    Now that you’re stranded, Will you play me in Nintendo?
    The brain’s gears turn, as for thoughts, produce few…
    We don’t need to smoke here, just hide like we used to…
    The time we owe dues to and seek nothing,
    Get youthful, and never notice the Fog of the Bleak coming…
    Which depends on cash assets, jobs that pack caskets…
    You may not worship Jesus, yet you don’t attend the black masses…
    That sting in their lesson, fire of adult wings cling to the brethren…
    Due to this fire, not even the Fountain can extinguish the present…
    Demonic banquets vanquish the Youth and the backlash…
    The current drowns the Present, you only breathe in a flashback…
    Schizophrenic diseases replenish in the grey that I mention-
    what happened before you sold your soul and started paying Attention…
    let me engage you…

    So,
    I'm at the top of the mountain listenin' to echoes shouting.
    I Know I'm heading south, and I reminisce all my doubts and
    tribulations while the happiness pours out my pores like a fountain.
    Distilled within it lies youth, you bevilled
    with this picture I've bestilled; The park N how I was thrilled;
    My smile: accompanied by the cutest dimples, and the feeling it filled
    now erased by the drool that trickles down that same cheek!
    I Used to play ball N tell myself "It won't be this simple next week."
    So I made sure the Praxises were a little past bleek.
    Now I Dwindle incomplete; I was number eleven in that fleet,
    now at school games I dont have a benched seat....Close by
    I look at the drop that contains my original nose, eyes,
    belly, hands and feet. Then I wonder if this globe tries
    to lay down the brush strokes right....But all I know's sight,
    and it shows me the rap battles I'd have Adverse ghostwrite!
    But, Now im on my own souls plight, like when i decided to hold tight
    and saved my cousin! She doesn't owe life, she owes luck,
    and owes the fact i don't visit her all drugged when showin up!
    But I visit this fountain after growin' up; Life was slow enough
    to be forgotten; Now it could show me why the goings rough.
    "Show me much" I ask of it, as I swallow the water from it.
    This isn't a fountain of youth, It's a fountain of me at my Summits,
    and i don't drink it because I'm a knowledge hungry dumb bitch,
    I drink to remember acceptance, like brunch tables and lunch its.....

    Cyanide to the innocence and experience, the combination-
    The fountain untouchable because of this complication…

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    This was a real nice piece, but i see you kept going off subject a bit and your structure was okay but overral this was a nice piece, i would love to see more creative topics from you man...Peace

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    thanx man....uppin........links comin soon...............

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    No problem man, just stay up

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    Cloud formations float and mold into verse
    The fog lifts and tumbleweeds roll in reversed…
    Role is reversed, felt the becoming, uncouth…
    A tear drop, I fear not of the fountain of youth…
    Arrive draped in darkness, grasping the past’s Grail…
    This is the one time that I could shed the Black Veil…

    Just for the company, purposely, I meant though-
    Now that you’re stranded, Will you play me in Nintendo?

    Which depends on cash assets, jobs that pack caskets…
    You may not worship Jesus, yet you don’t attend the black masses…
    That sting in their lesson, fire of adult wings cling to the brethren…
    Due to this fire, not even the Fountain can extinguish the present…
    Demonic banquets vanquish the Youth and the backlash…
    The current drowns the Present, you only breathe in a flashback…

    now erased by the drool that trickles down that same cheek!
    I Used to play ball N tell myself "It won't be this simple next week."
    So I made sure the Praxises were a little past bleek.
    Now I Dwindle incomplete; I was number eleven in that fleet,
    now at school games I dont have a benched seat....Close by
    I look at the drop that contains my original nose, eyes,
    belly, hands and feet. Then I wonder if this globe tries

    and owes the fact i don't visit her all drugged when showin up!
    But I visit this fountain after growin' up; Life was slow enough
    to be forgotten; Now it could show me why the goings rough.

    Cyanide to the innocence and experience, the combination-
    The fountain untouchable because of this complication…


    very good man this was a very good intellectual verses really was deep had very good potential in this didnt have a much of a story in it but u did have some mentally pictures that u described very well had a hott line at the end that i really enjoyed tha complication part but u did very well in this keep workin at it u got alot of potential and i could really see u becomin better man good job

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    Quote Originally Posted by AL CAPONE
    Cloud formations float and mold into verse
    The fog lifts and tumbleweeds roll in reversed…
    Role is reversed, felt the becoming, uncouth…
    A tear drop, I fear not of the fountain of youth…
    Arrive draped in darkness, grasping the past’s Grail…
    This is the one time that I could shed the Black Veil…

    Just for the company, purposely, I meant though-
    Now that you’re stranded, Will you play me in Nintendo?

    Which depends on cash assets, jobs that pack caskets…
    You may not worship Jesus, yet you don’t attend the black masses…
    That sting in their lesson, fire of adult wings cling to the brethren…
    Due to this fire, not even the Fountain can extinguish the present…
    Demonic banquets vanquish the Youth and the backlash…
    The current drowns the Present, you only breathe in a flashback…

    now erased by the drool that trickles down that same cheek!
    I Used to play ball N tell myself "It won't be this simple next week."
    So I made sure the Praxises were a little past bleek.
    Now I Dwindle incomplete; I was number eleven in that fleet,
    now at school games I dont have a benched seat....Close by
    I look at the drop that contains my original nose, eyes,
    belly, hands and feet. Then I wonder if this globe tries

    and owes the fact i don't visit her all drugged when showin up!
    But I visit this fountain after growin' up; Life was slow enough
    to be forgotten; Now it could show me why the goings rough.

    Cyanide to the innocence and experience, the combination-
    The fountain untouchable because of this complication…


    very good man this was a very good intellectual verses really was deep had very good potential in this didnt have a much of a story in it but u did have some mentally pictures that u described very well had a hott line at the end that i really enjoyed tha complication part but u did very well in this keep workin at it u got alot of potential and i could really see u becomin better man good job
    your fuckin wack. you need to stop being so ignorant you lazy fuckin faggot.

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