it was ok...need alot of work...nothin was really hott to me...sorta fast pace...datz ok...work on ya vocab...elevate b..EZ
it was ok...need alot of work...nothin was really hott to me...sorta fast pace...datz ok...work on ya vocab...elevate b..EZ
You had some wordplay in there, keep that up. It is needed for a piece like this to stay interesting. Work on your structure, you had to get to the rhymes quicker in some places. Continue to practice writing, and go into detail with a topic.
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Originally Posted by tHe BiG sHiT
yo y dont u stfu u fucking hoe.And spak$ that was some nice shit man i was really feeling the flow to man good job.
This was a little simple man, try adding a bit of OOMPH! to your piece, something people will want to read you know?
You're vocab is alright i guess, Id like to see how you were on a topical...
Keep em up
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yo that was pretty tight you had fast flow and you had good vocab so good job man
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Thanks for the feedback on this people
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