I liked the story a lot. You developed both characters by using the dialogue, which worked well. The dialogue fit in, and didn't take away from the flow of the piece. You put emotion into the characters, and it couls be felt. The piece was pretty long, but it seemed so short reading it. Had a nice touch at the end with the rest in peace.
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