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    7th Warrior
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    Just Rhyming (please leave feedback)

    write my flows in heiroglyphics, mathematically scientific/
    resurrect spirits of wizards, assisted by laws of physics/
    prolific, relentless, gifted like christians at christmas/
    sacrilegious, get viscious against fictiuos cocked religions/
    spitting with eygptians, tribal bibles burn thru your vitals/
    like pyros and hydro, igniting on spirals in Cairo/
    look for me behind you, roaming the zones of the unknown/
    where animals feast on the bones and kidney stones on Jesus's throne/
    so arm your clones, modified genetic chromosomes/
    plus enhance the stars to ride and kill Ceasar and conquer Rome/
    so fuck your pagan morals, my paranormal vocals will scold you/
    burn the homes of nobles, they yodles, while i'm at it even Constantinoble/
    empire embezzitine, i intervene on Heavens mezzenine/
    and spread this terror gleam, i see corpses of foes like killing dreams/
    even ettiquity, aquatically pressing for requitties/
    social remedies to steadily wipe out the enemy/
    with vector sensory, laser tazers planted by aliens/
    a subterrainian, pladiums, and plantetariums, killers and barbarians/
    these are the barriers, heading from areas, next to Aquarius/
    locked in the pyramids, the most cresent awaits the essence/
    the most heavenly presence, peasants repent the suspensful vengence/
    sentence carve the lessons, as i exit the holy monolithes/
    7th Warrioris prophecised, and ran off the arceologists....

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    ¤|-.Alpha.-|¤
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    Decent , Vocab was nice, But if your gonna use large vocab then work on your flow some.

  3. #3
    G-Money
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    ^^ i agree wit alpha work on the flow if its containin so much big words....but the vocab was nice maybe a lil advanced for some of the ppl on this site....try evenin out ur bars.... even though i know ur were rhymin... multis helped alot... nice drop...return the favor

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=177836

  4. #4
    Actually i think this was above average.
    It had a real good vocabulary and really intense rhymes.
    Yeh this was definately an above average drop,above alot of drops ive seen lately in the open mic section,i want to see more of your work.

  5. #5
    Mindprizn
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    i think it was an intense drop,... but the way you used your words needs a little work, like the first two users said.

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    Quote Originally Posted by 7th Warrior
    write my flows in heiroglyphics, mathematically scientific/
    resurrect spirits of wizards, assisted by laws of physics/
    prolific, relentless, gifted like christians at christmas/
    sacrilegious, get viscious against fictiuos cocked religions/
    spitting with eygptians, tribal bibles burn thru your vitals/
    like pyros and hydro, igniting on spirals in Cairo/
    look for me behind you, roaming the zones of the unknown/
    where animals feast on the bones and kidney stones on Jesus's throne/
    so arm your clones, modified genetic chromosomes/
    plus enhance the stars to ride and kill Ceasar and conquer Rome/
    so fuck your pagan morals, my paranormal vocals will scold you/
    burn the homes of nobles, they yodles, while i'm at it even Constantinoble/
    empire embezzitine, i intervene on Heavens mezzenine/
    and spread this terror gleam, i see corpses of foes like killing dreams/
    even ettiquity, aquatically pressing for requitties/
    social remedies to steadily wipe out the enemy/
    with vector sensory, laser tazers planted by aliens/
    a subterrainian, pladiums, and plantetariums, killers and barbarians/
    these are the barriers, heading from areas, next to Aquarius/
    locked in the pyramids, the most cresent awaits the essence/
    the most heavenly presence, peasants repent the suspensful vengence/
    sentence carve the lessons, as i exit the holy monolithes/
    7th Warrioris prophecised, and ran off the arceologists....




    this shit is hot....love the vocab...and the flow itself .......if it was a story the chronological order fab...
    this would be the 1st piece of written that follows almost an outline format....
    i hope u keep shit like this up....

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    yo that was good i liked the big words you used it showed you actually have vocabulary it might have not sound right cause i read it in my flow but i'm pretty sure you got it right
    TOP GUN
    DOUBLE DUCE YOU'LL LEARN

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    You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

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