my verse did have more multis and personals in it tho, the flow wasnt even that bad, you can have the vote rhythm but I'd appreciate it if you could like pm Al Capone and get him to break the votes into categoies, that goes for everyone!
categories:
flow:
multis:
punches:
creativity:
personals:
thats the voting structure
IF you piss me off believe that you'll be stuck wit my pain
I'll stick my dick through ya skull just to fuck wit ya brain
-Multiman
tryna ta get some more feednack n votes wif da feedback adequate like multiman said
iight
ok in flow rhyth
in multis dont know what that shit is
in punches rhyth
creative is rhyth
and in personals i guess is u but i didnt know that was really somethin to vote for it should have been vocab and word structure and if it was those rhyth would have had u anywayz so elevate next time got that u aint that bad
give votes and feedback yall come on
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ANALYSIS-
multi-
I'll make you dissapear like a magician cuz your a whack trick
make you back flip It's like I got cancer, I'm just that sick
you wanna win this? NO way yo this gon be a quick K-O
you gettin beatin like you was will smith I'm tony Yayo
thats 2 bars I already won this kick you in the stomach
Put you in the hospitalmake you lose all battles from it
fuckin poser, wit the game and outkast signature pics
your like paper, ripped gettin busted in the lip QUICK
your too scared to show your ugly face and I can tell
shit I bet after 1 session your webcam uninstalls it self
I took it easy on you tried like 1 fourth of my ability
I still advise you not to throw ya weak ass skill at me
Finisher:
It's over kid and it's inevitable that you had no chance dude
you a rhythmagician, quit rap and learn some more dance moves
Ok overall not a bad verse u need o work on a betta vocab choice and tha punches u need to pack punch that is basically the ideal view in a battle just work on that and i did like ur finisher but dont quote it was kind of cocky
points for verse-3.5/10
rhyth-
Im outta his league, like seeds tryina take marijuana’s prestige/
This herb aint dope! Ya words don’t even match up to one leaf/
Spits seductive? Makes sense, MULTIMAN beggin for a striptease/
Fuck spittin, to defeat your keys all I need to do is sneeze!/
Can you compete? guess not! ya verse juss spells out defeat/
Im heat, my text splits ya beats when my arrangement of letters meet/
Im proving you aint king, this quickthings already got ya drooling/
Ya got me snoozing, Ill give this wannabe a lesson in veterinary schooling/
‘This’ ‘punk’ ‘sits’ ‘here’ ‘with’ ‘his’ ‘book’ ‘of’ ‘puns’ ‘but’ ‘ his’ ‘styles’ ‘decayed’/
You gay, AINT YOU HEARD THAT YOUR WORDPLAY IS JUST PLAYED!/
I drop shit like im excretin, dish a few lessons to this uneducated cretin/
You searing? Couldn’t drop hot shit if you mishandled central heatin/
Cant drop keys like they stuck on a ring, wont see tomorrow ‘ding ding’/
Rockin a paperclip necklace is the closest you'll ever get to even fake bling/
Im bringin heat, my words hittin are parallel to devilry photosynthesisin/
He thought i was gonna lose this battle but he dont kno im good at conivin
Rhyth good vocab long lines but u didnt pack punches need to work on dat nice flow nice vocab choice good word structure just work on tha punches u need to add an approach to it-5.0
v/rhyth
thanx fa da vote Capone
I'll make you dissapear like a magician cuz your a whack trick
make you back flip It's like I got cancer, I'm just that sick
you wanna win this? NO way yo this gon be a quick K-O
you gettin beatin like you was will smith I'm tony Yayo
^^Okay..Decent lines
thats 2 bars I already won this kick you in the stomach
Put you in the hospitalmake you lose all battles from it
fuckin poser, wit the game and outkast signature pics
your like paper, ripped gettin busted in the lip QUICK
NO wack...Come harder than that
your too scared to show your ugly face and I can tell
shit I bet after 1 session your webcam uninstalls it self
I took it easy on you tried like 1 fourth of my ability
I still advise you not to throw ya weak ass skill at me
^^ okay... some decent lines
Finisher:
It's over kid and it's inevitable that you had no chance dude
you a rhythmagician, quit rap and learn some more dance moves
^^Lol nice
vs
m outta his league, like seeds tryina take marijuana’s prestige/
This herb aint dope! Ya words don’t even match up to one leaf/
Spits seductive? Makes sense, DOE BAGZ beggin for a striptease/
Fuck spittin, to defeat your keys all I need to do is sneeze!/
Can you compete? guess not! ya verse juss spells out defeat/
Im heat, my text splits ya beats when my arrangement of letters meet/
^^^No wack...Come harder than that flow was off
Im proving you aint king, this quickthings already got ya drooling/
Ya got me snoozing, Ill give this wannabe a lesson in veterinary schooling/
‘This’ ‘punk’ ‘sits’ ‘here’ ‘with’ ‘his’ ‘book’ ‘of’ ‘puns’ ‘but’ ‘ his’ ‘styles’ ‘decayed’/
You gay, AINT YOU HEARD THAT YOUR WORDPLAY IS JUST PLAYED!/
I drop shit like im excretin, dish a few lessons to this uneducated cretin/
You searing? Couldn’t drop hot shit if you mishandled central heatin/
^^Dec. Some lines were wack tho
Cant drop keys like they stuck on a ring, wont see tomorrow ‘ding ding’/
Rockin a paperclip necklace is the closest you'll ever get to even fake bling/
Im bringin heat, my words hittin are parallel to devilry photosynthesisin/
He thought i was gonna lose this battle but he dont kno im good at conivin/
^^Okay.Played but okay
V/Al, Better overall verse
RTF, And explain the vote so it dont get DQ'd and then ill poll
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=180972&page=1
LMAO my bad, Vote-Rhyme lol Explained ^^^
thanx lol
come on ppl votes n feedback ya'll
come opn ppl give feedback n vote on dis battle
wee bof need ta elevate
vote rhytmagician becuase he came strong on the first two lines and his structure was okay could be better his punch lines was out standing from what i look at but it was an okay battle overall i vote da rhythmagician8/10 and multi man 6/10
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