For You ................

[Sinthia]

For you I would climb
The highest mountain peak
Swim the deepest ocean
Your love I do seek.
For you I would cross
The rivers most wide
Walk the hottest desert sand
To have you by my side.

For you are the one
Who makes me whole
You've captured my heart
And touched my soul.

For you are the one
That stepped out of my dreams
Gave me new hope
Showed me what love means.
For you alone
Are my reason to live
For the compassion you show
And the care that you give.

You came into my life
And made me complete
Each time I see you
My heart skips a beat.

For you define beauty
In both body and mind
Your soft, cutie face
More beauty I'll ne'er find.

For you are the one
God sent from above
The guy I needed
For whom I do love.

[ThaShauman]

first off THE ORANGE KILLED MY EYES!!!! lol but really it did -wipes retinas-

but i do like your work... al i have to say really is incorperate more vocabulary && use more imagery.... overall mami youve got mad talent and i see you doing nothin more than elevating the more you produce work

[urslimshadygurl]

i like this poem a lot. u could up ur vocab a little but other than that, its got a smooth flow and i can tell u wrote it from ur heart....Great Job gurl

[Sinthia]

first off THE ORANGE KILLED MY EYES!!!! lol but really it did -wipes retinas-

but i do like your work... al i have to say really is incorperate more vocabulary && use more imagery.... overall mami youve got mad talent and i see you doing nothin more than elevating the more you produce work

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thanks pa

[Sinthia]

i like this poem a lot. u could up ur vocab a little but other than that, its got a smooth flow and i can tell u wrote it from ur heart....Great Job gurl

thanks for ur opinion

[Varentao]

Kind of piece you'd give to another. Basic but would do the job unless this is really within you. But you did seem comfortable in this piece. Nice.

[Neruda II]

Too simple.

Metaphors and concept has been done to death.

Syntax was played.

Nothing original. You did seem to have some emotion in this but it was too unoriginal to get into it.

[Sinthia]

Kind of piece you'd give to another. Basic but would do the job unless this is really within you. But you did seem comfortable in this piece. Nice.

thanks for ur opinion

[Sinthia]

Too simple.

Metaphors and concept has been done to death.

Syntax was played.

Nothing original. You did seem to have some emotion in this but it was too unoriginal to get into it.

gracias por tu opinion. mexicano look alike

[Rose]

This was a nice poem, i enjoyed it. I think if you come up w/ more original ideas and elevate on your vocab and add a lil more imagery you can write some better stuff, but i did like this so nice work.

[Sinthia]

thanks rose

[Neruda II]

You bit this.

[Dan Dare]

Mediocre poem, it's all cliche as fuck. And if you bit, you shoulda chose better.

[Neruda II]

She did bite, if you type the first part of the poem into google. Tons of other poems will come up that are basically identical, that's why it looks so cliche'.

[ThaShauman]

if you do that w/ anyones poems the same outcome will result

google finds shit IVE SAID VERBATIM but shows links of it comin from other ppl