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  1. #1
    M.C. FORCE
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    "not right"

    Feelin Dazy and hazy what-cha wanna do baby Not right. By Force.

    I knock my own self out Im bound to go Cra-zay

    you can call me an e-regular-black slim shady

    just with a more ghetto flow and without the white baby.


    im too hot to handle and-im way to hot for school

    you over gluck me and I knock you out fool

    now im the mothafuckin type never too be scared of no body

    I can put three or 4 shells up in one's body

    chex ya body, flex ya body, then rezarecks the body

    go take a pody cause, haters are just tryin to takeover the world

    but to them its like Icy niggas like dead people.

    its simple, because im the one dat don't give a damn, im rollin wit a dimple

    my rims spinn what-ever ways ness-serry

    I come with dark rims you niggas get very scary

    and now im barly, hearing what stupid hoes have got to say

    cause im like usher I choose to have it my way

    cause I am force and I indorce, to keep things in ones sorce

    pop a torche, grab a bitch and make her ride you like a horse

    you thinkin im play-in, listen to what im say-in

    im like a sayin, wit out da spray-in

    its not a conversation that im make-in im just say-in whats real

    I go up to these hoes and tell dem whats da deal

    its like you tak-in weed but in pills

    you know your thighs got my dick doin the chills

    now come on boo quit trippin gett-a clue

    look at you like a me, don't you see its you and me

    without me theirs no G, and with no G theirs no you So what the

    fuck get a clue. Baby boo. (end verse 1)

    course) somethings not right here
    how'ed I strike all this fear'
    I feel the end really near
    ima just stay as a pionner and lets go



    Now the secound thing happends, I start the spaz-ums

    my money comes in large then king and Lump sums

    I beat ya heart like drumbs, I got too much dough

    I got enough dough for an instant afro.

    corn roll that shit in and blow that shit out, Im way from LA but I know what

    the dirty souths about. now hear me out I mean somethin just an't right

    I make it on the next flight, to make it down to-night, ready to fight and ready to brawl

    and ima brawler, but I still got some bitches to help pop ones coller.

    now when I say F.O.R.C.E, do not be shy to holler

    I wonder what this girls would do for forces big doller

    ima jogger when it comes to makin flows to hurt the weak

    somethin an't right, I need to bust a niggas beak

    don't worry I can sneak and scan ones forhead, like the undead

    pop you full of lead and watch you rev-blead

    (now Watch ya head) because im sprayin like a main-i-ac

    fuckin with the con-yac, hollo tip straight in yo bac

    Ima big mac when it comes to helping ones supersized decker

    Ima boss nigga, I blast heat up and check yeah,

    like a quick nigga tryin to get his ends,better stop nigga before I find all ya friends

    somethin an't right im never that demanding, maybe im changing, or re-aranging

    my girl paging, like usher said she used the pager not the celluler phone, don't worry playa

    I got bitches in the zone, and if I can clone all of them I would, and this is how we do it in the wood,

    or in the hood, but wait now I know im goin crazy because If I can't believe my eyes is that a crack headed BAby!

    (Course)

  2. #2
    ShOrTySoUtH
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    not bad spit homie but if u re-worded this the flow would be better..

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    Dune Methane CrazyCarl's Avatar
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    You don't need to double space, it can turn some people off to the piece. Putting in the chorus makes it a more complete drop. This would probably be better on audio, becuase as text, there is not much to set it apart from the rest and make it special. If you can flow good to it however, it might work as a song. You can edit in or take out words from your lines to try to get them closer in length to straighten out the flow.
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