8 mileS

[Prophet™]

yo
can u feel my flow
i bone u like that
and u like it in the buttcrack
u suck at sucking cause u chokin
just like onstage uve been outspoken
cause im hittin bitches u hitting men
im not the one twidling the hen
yo dog stop choken ther chicken
cause my penis is the only thing ur licken
so check it one too
im burning u jew
like ursher with his boo
i stay fresh on the microphone
even when i have a chick to bone
ur home alone
ur a silly boy like Miculy Kulkin
ive got the best weed anybodies smokin
im not from the north im repin the south
i spit out fire cause ive got wasabi in my mouth
just let me be
in 3 years ill be on mtv
u dont even no me
u dont even have it
i spit game like b-rabbit

[K.O PushA]

..................... need lots work on the structure lots of work

[gem n eye/*DUO*]

dude, you suck

[WhiteNoise]

bro....where the hell do i start???nah i won't start anywhere.......but hey at least we know one thing......u aint bitin....

[DALC]

Wow.

[CrazyCarl]

If you want to get better, check out the help section, and keep writing. Work on topics that you can express something, not just rhymes.

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[Raid-R]

this wasnt so good man
and thats nothing like b-rabbit at all
he uses more mature words than a 5th grader
u gotta work on ur vocab, expand a little
dont ryme in same 1,2 order, mix it up
I give that a 4/10

[treypound]

i agree thisn guy needs help lol lol i dont no what tha hell that was.

[Novacain]

Oh my...

A lot of elevation is needed here, Im sorry son but you're not Eminem or B.Rabbit...

Keep writing