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    Jesus's death...First Person

    Sight


    The crowd followed close, day approaching its peak
    that moment earth sighed, and the clouds began to weep
    Feet Poundin the street witta sense of urgency ,Eager to see
    The downfall of a Great Man, who coulda easily controlled destiny
    Emotions Festering, sweat dripping from his body and blood stained
    but yet he perservered throughout, cuz he knew it was not in vain
    They peirced em and the crowd chanted as barabus was freed
    took all the burdens of man, never let me know the pain he conceived
    juss then lightining striked striked across the sky, eyes began to wide
    left their to die he let outta cry,then juss let his head tilt to the side



    Smell


    Toxins of all kinds filled the air on this certain Day
    Filth exposed to lungs and wreaked of Body Decay
    Out of the way!,Screamed the guards,stinking of Guilt
    Stinches clinged to Jesus's body, as if resting and waiting
    for the death oder to be amist the air, lest they be saving
    the very stinch their cruel Smell for the day of final rest
    will they juss fill the air wit the devils scent?,day of the death
    or were they their to warn us, or were they their to scour
    or were they there to mourn us, the day of jesus death was sour



    Feel



    With the crowd behing the cause, i was subltly quite
    since jesus's execution was occuring, i did nothin about it
    i was fighting to hold back tears, and i struggled to swallow
    weeping drowned out by the others that followed, Hollow
    Just an emptiness, Gathering growing bigger inside, I felt
    as if i was being consumed by the devil, & i'd swallow myself
    Body just melt, thats what i told myself to do and i swear
    i was the saddest person on earth..but yet shed a single tear
    it was Jesus's crucifixion, it was a very horrible act, in Fact
    he shouted "Eloi, Eloi, lama sabacthani",felt 100 lashes across my back
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    This has very depth in every bit and single aspect, i enjoyed it and gave me the feeling as if i was almost there. Man , great job!

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    Re: Jesus's death...First Person

    uppin respect my poems niggaz
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    Re: Jesus's death...First Person

    close this. so old.
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