Connection

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

Watch... A life's end is nothing less than Reflection.
I saw my end as a modem....
...Going through events to make a connection..
I hardly drop skilled, though if its ill, its not contagious...
And looking back now I Turned my rhymes around...
.. even before I flipped open to the pages...
Can you feel what I've become, A has been, without being
Something always told me I'd amount to nothing...
...And nothing is all the Change I've been seeing...
I'd figure my life was so lonely, I might as well just die alone
Held the knife to my wrist, And failed to make the connection...
...The modem aint find the dial tone...

So Im living, pouring out my thoughts and they form a puddle
A puddle so blunt that you stepped in, but the effect was subtle
I ask and ask but I dont recieve much that I think I need
My eyes blinded by envy, and my tongue only tastes Greed
So I recieved what I wanted just not how I wanted at all...
My sense of touch was skewed, and my ears never even saw
So If my senses were mixed up how do I know I made the Connection ?
My ears aint seeing the lines, my eyes cant feel the cords
...and my touch tells me I lost the reception...
I look around and notice a plate of food my ears didnt see
And As I eat my tongue, hungers for more, craving for greed..
I thought I started out wise, But I was foolish for what happened..
A fool am I, Contacting spirits, and I connected with a madman..

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...84#post2046184
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...98#post2046198

[Illus']

Ok I did reply on this last night
but my pc manages to mess up...


"Watch... A life's end is nothing less than Reflection.
I saw my end as a modem....
...Going through events to make a connection."

I like the word connection and word usage
on these lines nothing great however good
. I like that style...


"So Im living, pouring out my thoughts and they form a puddle
A puddle so blunt that you stepped in, but the effect was subtle
I ask and ask but I dont recieve much that I think I need
My eyes blinded by envy, and my tongue only tastes Greed"

You showed pretty good imagery on these lines
here nicley done.


Overall pretty good piece. Nothing wow however
I was really feeling some of your lines. I wonder
if sometimes you just get lazy...?

peace

[Sir Skiddz SoPhrenic]

Yeah, I had some issues blocking my mind when I was writing this. Usually I try to keep a clear mind but everyones yellin or nagging, and i basically picked a bad time to write this.