User Tag List

Showing results 1 to 4 of 4

Thread: My thoughts on "LOVE"

  1. #1
    DECA
    Guest

    My thoughts on "LOVE"

    minds split unable to transmit ligit waves/ thoughts have been captured and enslaved to be portrayed/ hearts being betrayed/ world so cold/ no one even looks or takes the time to see what it is that they behold/ none-the-less give it a chance to unfold/ its microscopic/ now-a-days love aint being felt its just a topic/ cuz to many hearts have been broken/ and feeling are left unspoken/ fear/ is why its hard to let someone near/ afraid you will once again be crushed is why from love you steer clear/ then you realize its what you need/ its the reason you bleed/ and it keeps you on the path to exceed/ deep/ emotions maken it hard to sleep/ its a feeling that you would love to keep/ cuz it makes you feel secure/ but at times your unsure and you wonder if that love is pure/ then you remember how bad it felt the last time/ so you dont let love close and you melt the last chime/ finding yourself unable to trust no matter how hard you thrust to do that just/ in disgust/ cuz one person broke through the crust/ and decided they wanted to play/ now you push love away/ and you remain lost and lonely/ knowing that love is your one and only...

  2. #2
    shit whats up DirtBoy69's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jun 2002
    Location
    Kincardine Ontario
    Age
    40
    Posts
    296
    Battle Record
    2-4
    pretty good the flow got choppy in spots try and keep the same bar length it would help besides that it wasn't that bad
    win loss record 11-14 with 5 k.o's



  3. #3
    You've Earned a Custom Title! kmfrob's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2002
    Location
    Liverpool , UK Comin to PLAY
    Age
    40
    Posts
    200
    ya need to chop it up a bit cos ya always lose the flow. part from that this was good but a little simple. concept was good but ya vocab never really expanded much. still keep spittin and check mine bent politicians.

  4. #4
    DECA
    Guest
    good looking our but my bad i ment to put this in the poem forum but oh wells thanks for the advice anyways...

Similar Threads

  1. Ten Fingaz doing that love song - "Dirty Love"
    By 10fingaz in forum The Studio
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: August 2nd, 2010, 07:01 PM
  2. Replies: 19
    Last Post: June 30th, 2004, 02:18 PM
  3. "Love Me" (sample of "PYT")
    By Big JD in forum The Studio
    Replies: 0
    Last Post: June 19th, 2004, 08:31 PM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •