Gothic Sadness

[Foreshadow]

I’ve looking and found nothing
I’ve tried so hard for something
But what?
I’m naive to my own feelings
I know nothing about who I am
I know no boundaries of pain
I cut myself to see my own blood
I show no sign of emotion on my face
You nothing of who I’ am like I do
Why must I blame you when it is I
I would feel empty but I don’t know the
…feeling
I’m lost but I don’t know where to look
To even find a trace of myself or my home
I’m dressed in black to hide the already unknown
Why do I question I don’t even know
When I’ am done searching for my part of life
Then you will be told
For I’ am a stranger to myself with no feeling
I would cry but I’ve lost emotion of grieving
This is my gothic sadness



Writer's Note: I'm not really gothic nor do I suffer from these problems, It's juyst a subject, oh yeah I'm trying a new style.

[Bloom.Quist]

Rules


Read em...one poem a day..

Closed. I'll re-open this tomorrow

[Bloom.Quist]

Re-opened

[Foreshadow]

Upping for feedback.

[In.Fa.Red]

Damn 1 Poem A Day....Shit....Anyway

This poem Was Nice...The emotions Were Good And The imagery Could Of been Better But it Was good...The Structure Was a Lil Off And I Didnt Like It...The Vocab You used In this Piece was Good It Made It More Enjoyable To Read...Keep It Up This Was A Real Nice Piece

[Foreshadow]

The structure is so posed to be some what like this but thanks anyways.

[Foreshadow]

up..

[Chris Black]

Booo@you not getting more replies, concidering how much you reply to works.

Anyway, this just wasn't my bag. It was ok, but you know how sometimes something just doesn't hit you right. Keep writing, fam. I may come back and read this again when I get a chance. Lol@the note.

[Foreshadow]

Thanks Wicked'..
I've read it to and
it doesnt hit me and
I wrote it..

[.verity.]

well...

sad story, i would say theres alot of emotion but since you said this aint any of your feelings... i cant say that, cause deep down inside, if your the writter your not feeling the words you write cause they arent true, understand. Now if im wrong ima have to say you do feel somewhat this way your just expressing through words and reranging your thoughts... If you dont understand... than i cant explain it any better. Anyway good read for the most part, flowed well for poetry structure was more old school formal poetic. But cool ish for the most part.

neways keep droppin heat, PEACE...

[Foreshadow]

Thanks on the feed verity