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    Hells Decision

    When my body explodes I will dance the sacred dance
    Because I’ve been reborn into hells fury and know not romance
    I’m not sure of its identity but it has been uniquely disguised
    Not for safety but only when the truth has finally been realized
    Lies have been told from past to present, I’m considered hells defendant
    Nature has burned because of me; hell is scorching to a certain degree
    I have tried to overcome the negative energy with positive simplicity
    The gates of hell breathe a certain breeze that often smothers
    Transcending man so that we depend on the killing of eachother
    Seven times out of ten betrayal enters the gloomy damned picture
    Then you lose friends and lose focus on the fixture
    Hell’s mentality has changed a depiction, then my hands stricken
    I’m still oblivious to the transition and I’ve become sickened
    My throat has tightened, I don’t have to accept my new found burden
    I remember the somber voice from the first moment I heard him
    He said “Your soul has been black for awhile no more laughs and smiles
    Learn you deposition and take the lost soul to those very piles”
    I’m stuck in the underworld trying to take my place as hells defendant
    No matter how much the feeling eats at my limbs I must pretend it
    I have figured out all of my thoughts beyond that mellow purgatory
    But after all of the dreadful pain and disobedience god don’t ignore me






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    hmm...deeper meaning in this? Like your trying to find god by doin all these bad things to get hom to notice you? Or am I digging too deep?

    This was very good....emotion was well done as was imagry to me....internals were here and there....some lines were a bit long and carried a few too many syllables, but other than that this was well done...keep it up

    please peep http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=163863
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    Thanks on the feedback lyric.

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    dope piece........good emotion.......i'm feelin ya deeply.......keep it up.......

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    Thanks.

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    Feedback would be appreciated.

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    Good

    that was a nicely woven piece my man, i felt the concept, keep knockn em out.
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    Thanks for the feedback. ^

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