facts of life

[bloods]

Niggas shouldn't be giving their soul for a little fame//
Might end up in da hands of a fabolous fucking up your game//
Every time yourraps get stolen u need to change//
Like Jesus startin' over again as a baby in a manger//
Ya moma got altimerz(wrong spelling)so now she a stranger//
Da industry broke who da fuck is gonna pay ya//
people in da game tellin' u your in da small league we in da major//
hey but don't worry nigga they will pay u later(yea right)//
so change ya gun nigga point at another range//
cause niggas shouldn't be giving their soul for a littlt fame//

[Mistral]

you need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, thanks.

[Tha Track]

that was ok how it had the open line and the end line the same, there wasn't much emotion in that piece, just mainly statements and sort-of punches, good rhyming, good vocab, average structure, basic wodplay

overall, i think this was a good piece, u need to elevate and work on getting more complex wordplay, keep it comin

[Tha Track]

by the way, hit up the open mic in my sig, i got another OM comin, it'll be in my sig as soon as i post that hot shit

[bloods]

yo thankx for da feed back. come on people tell me what u think

[bloods]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...51#post1885551
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=161322

[X-factor!]

ya that was ok i mean it could be better... The wordplay like track said could be alot more complex. but nice little flow and not much enotion again like track said. but other then that it was ok.. practice makes perfect.

[Civilized Gangsta]

plaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyeddddddddd rhymes...........