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    danja
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    imagine

    its a bit short and i wanna extend but check.. first ever attempt at poetry

    you could never imagine my emotions inside
    took my heart in your stride and left me deprived
    inside, i try rebuilding my love but its hopeless
    without a heart in my body, thoughts.. they're useless
    deep within myself the battle begins
    im feeling deeply for you but pain has set in
    alas.. as god once told me only love will suceed
    its not worth fighting for im already beat.


    'eveyone listens but, nobody hears'

    danja

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    the emotions were strong and pure...i was feeling it for sure...so well put for such a short piece....displaying some talent for sure....elevate by reading and replying to other peoples pieces.....respect....
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