hey this was good shit, the piece was really deep. and your best gift is your imagery. great imagery. keep postin, i wanna see more of this
hey this was good shit, the piece was really deep. and your best gift is your imagery. great imagery. keep postin, i wanna see more of this
psssh.. He writes "Britishly" does he? lol
Good Job Oragami-boy. Very abstract indeed, but I think I have a few of my own ideas about where you're coming from. I agree with Maven and Avalon though, you might want to give your writings a little more coherency. They certainly do have their own obscure meanings to them, but the casual reader typically requires just a little more explanation than you have given us here.
You could have also done with giving this a few more multies/internals if you'd wanted to impress people even more and gone for the kill.
So yeah, anyway. There's not too much else that I can say that has not been said already, but keep writing. Drop me a PM as soon as your next piece drops and I'll hit it straight away, and I'll give it the same attention I gave to Lyric's last night.
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dis was da best i've ever seen good work 10/10 keep it up pose out
end dis for me bloods vs. aesop...................
You can't leave links to other forums for the Open Mic section, but thanks for upping this bitch for me!
can I kick it?
that shit was mad deep...keep that shit up
yo son shitz mad ill yo!!!!!!
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Abstract is dope. Like i said w/ your other open mic, your dope. again you impress me.
I would really like to hear you spit this though, cuz it's lenghty and i cant see it on a steady beat.
But as for the verse it was well written. your a poet. The title is the best part because you use it so well in your verse, you have a nice talent here, dont slow up.
But again there were some parts where you overused your vocab.(mabye that's my jellous side speakin cuz i dont think like that) I liked this peice as well, mabye more because i could read it off the thread. keep it fluid.
Actually, this one was written to a beat. And I could flow perfect (or so I thought) to it. Thanks for recognizing.
can I kick it?