Silver-lined Clouds

[The Godfather]

hey this was good shit, the piece was really deep. and your best gift is your imagery. great imagery. keep postin, i wanna see more of this

[spokenoh]

Thanks. Up.

[Dan Dare]

psssh.. He writes "Britishly" does he? lol

Good Job Oragami-boy. Very abstract indeed, but I think I have a few of my own ideas about where you're coming from. I agree with Maven and Avalon though, you might want to give your writings a little more coherency. They certainly do have their own obscure meanings to them, but the casual reader typically requires just a little more explanation than you have given us here.

You could have also done with giving this a few more multies/internals if you'd wanted to impress people even more and gone for the kill.

So yeah, anyway. There's not too much else that I can say that has not been said already, but keep writing. Drop me a PM as soon as your next piece drops and I'll hit it straight away, and I'll give it the same attention I gave to Lyric's last night.

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[bloods]

dis was da best i've ever seen good work 10/10 keep it up pose out

[bloods]

end dis for me bloods vs. aesop...................

[spokenoh]

You can't leave links to other forums for the Open Mic section, but thanks for upping this bitch for me!

[YoungTuan]

that shit was mad deep...keep that shit up

[N-Demik]

yo son shitz mad ill yo!!!!!!

[SirusX]

Abstract is dope. Like i said w/ your other open mic, your dope. again you impress me.

I would really like to hear you spit this though, cuz it's lenghty and i cant see it on a steady beat.

But as for the verse it was well written. your a poet. The title is the best part because you use it so well in your verse, you have a nice talent here, dont slow up.

But again there were some parts where you overused your vocab.(mabye that's my jellous side speakin cuz i dont think like that) I liked this peice as well, mabye more because i could read it off the thread. keep it fluid.

[spokenoh]

Actually, this one was written to a beat. And I could flow perfect (or so I thought) to it. Thanks for recognizing.

[SirusX]

yup- you got skil