I'm checkin in now i guess.
Knockout
Def by mouf
I'm checkin in now i guess.
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fuck it i'm tired of waitin, i'll just post now.
Knockout u can post by friday or whatever.
Knockout is what this match is soon ta be
Literally my 1-2 punches strike faces and kidneys,
I'm here to tell u simply, what ya mama neva could
u ain't from Dominicana it's nowhere near ya hood
U straight outta loserwood where the homos and dummies like to play,
Sorry did i insult u? that's not what i meant to say
What i really wanna talk about is how bad u fuckin suck
If u ever win a battle anywhere it's becuz of ya luck
U couldn't hit a KnockOut punch if u tried,
Cuz u weaker than a bitch the moment hotflashes arrive
when ya PMS subsides, U can come meet ur demise....
...If u had an advantage in the show u still wouldn't survive,
Def is givin free rides.....Back to ya crib
and not to see u cuz ya mama told me, I got dibs
Take a shot to ya ribs, body and face and see if u don't end up wit more than a scrape
Theres my 15.....go on and spit.
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Damn, knock, where u at.
R u gonna spit or what nigga.
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aighht nigga
I picture this...full time nerd mothefucka...
talking bout punches hes gonna crunch me get off
my own feet...but betta what that im not dominican...
that nigga got the exclusive on my punch list...before i
smack u...unplug this lil bitch out of his nasty pulmons...
I bet u a tiny little herb...matter of fact im tired
of playing with this young kid... what are gonna do when
its real...shits on ur pants...nigga is not gangsta...
only appreciation woulda be spittin on the net...nigga like frontin
tryin to be tough u look like an asshole...i say i dont even
got to box u...only need to step up in the ring...ppl sayin u got
murdered...knockOut got this shit possesed... callin out that nigga
def by mouf...gay motherfucker...dont even know what Washington Heights
is...imma go ahead and take this bitch by his neck... really show him
what this is...
my bad yo i was not here...tryin to fix the car...
It's straight amn, but now we just need some votes.
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wtf, is my uppin doin no good. c'mon people we need 5 people to vote so that somebody can win....
C'mon let's get some votes.
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C'mon now peeps, We still don't have no votes on this battle, somebuddy needs a win.
So help us out by voting.
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def by mouf - vocab was basic, aiight punches but nothing too noteworthy, you had a nice flow, even had some wordplay. What you need to work on is uppin your vocab and gettin some hard hittin punches.
Knowledge- your structure is shitty man, you should figure out a way you could type your rhymes so that it doesnt look like one big run-on sentence, flow wasnt too good, didnt really see any punches, just filler and self glorification, take notes from some vets or sumthin
Overall: this battle was decent, but fairly one-sided
Vote: Def by mouf for a nice flow and some punches
~def by mouf
-vocab was basic, verse basic, punches were basic. Punches were weak.
flow was a little choppy at times. structure could have been better.
all i can say is that you need to elevate. Think of witty and creative punches.
~knockout
-wow, i didnt even bother even reading your whole verse. i dont even think
none of it even rhymed. structre and flow was awful. punches were weak(if there was any) yea you need to elevate man.
~overall
-both need to elevate. def got this for actualling rhyming and had punches.
try to remember not to self glorify yourself in battles thats a big no no.
both need to try to think of harder punches. nothin basic or weak like, you suck
or your herb its just to basic. be personal in battles that guarantees hard punches.
make a wordplay on his name or diss where hes from, age, etc.
~My vote
-thats that, after carefully reviewing both verses..
def by mouf gets my vote
~Tagailo
yo man i give this one to def by mouth, more experience i guess, that helps he had more punches that actually hit hard and word play better, knockout, u just got knock the fuck out, this gunna b a K-O, ur name back fired on u, u need to elavte some and throw betta punches and u b iight but fo now,
Def By Mouf
return da favor yo
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thanks for voting..
anyways.. here's how I saw it..
Basically.. neither verse amazed me. No one really stood out
at all.. but, how do you expect to win a battle when your whole
verse doesnt rhyme? Thats directed towards knockout.. its
like you were writing random shit for school or something.. letting
out ur feelings in a journal? C'mon kid.. if ya wanna win battles,
ya gotta learn alot quick. Rhyming should be a given. As for you
def, you won this for basically coming less wack. BOTH of you need
to go read the tutorials or somethin.. I`m not hating.. just lettin
ya`all know what to do to improve.
v/ def by mouf
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if i was able to vote....already, heres how it wud be like
Def by mouf's drop was simple...yet more hard hitting than Knockouts drop...WHY???
well...back in my pre-school years, i was taugh a lil somethin teachers called a RHYME...this is where two or more words sound alike when spoken...at least look a like if its in text...this obviously was the lesson that Knockout missed cos he was too busy fiddling with poopipe...none of any of ur badly layed out lines rymed at all...this is the first thing u think of before entering this damn forum, either u were on crack when u wrote ur drop or u were typing using ur toes...which is impressive but not entertaining...sorry to diss on you but...
ITS THE STUPIDEST MISTAKE TO ENTER A "RAP BATTLE FORUM" AND POST A DROP WITHOUT A SINGLE PAIR OF WORDS THAT RHYME...THIS BOARD WAS MADE FOR RHYMIN...
im sorry to go on about this but this "mishap" as u mite call it is so stupid my 5 year old brother could have typed up a better verse...and the funny part is i dont have a little brother...dude u seriously need some help from the ELEVATING SECTION...also purchase a book named "RHYMING FOR DUMMIES", keep busy with these two things for about 10 years and ull prolly be able to come back with something that actually rymes...
(im real dissappointed i have to write this long but this person obviously made arguably the most stupid mistake in the forum EVER) yknahmean!!
i almost forgot...if i were able to vote...guess who i would vote for....
Some KNEW me as 3rd-eye
#~Words Of Wisdom~#
def by mouf
Knockout is what this match is soon ta be
Literally my 1-2 punches strike faces and kidneys,
... aiight this is ok i didnt like it though
I'm here to tell u simply, what ya mama neva could
u ain't from Dominicana it's nowhere near ya hood
... ha ha this hit harder
U straight outta loserwood where the homos and dummies like to play,
Sorry did i insult u? that's not what i meant to say
What i really wanna talk about is how bad u fuckin suck
If u ever win a battle anywhere it's becuz of ya luck
...ha ha see this is much better this is harder than anything that fool said
U couldn't hit a KnockOut punch if u tried,
Cuz u weaker than a bitch the moment hotflashes arrive
... this was funny, good bar
when ya PMS subsides, U can come meet ur demise....
...If u had an advantage in the show u still wouldn't survive,
Def is givin free rides.....Back to ya crib
and not to see u cuz ya mama told me, I got dibs
Take a shot to ya ribs, body and face and see if u don't end up wit more than a scrape
... wasnt feelin tha last part at all overall aiight verse
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I picture this...full time nerd mothefucka...
talking bout punches hes gonna crunch me get off
my own feet...but betta what that im not dominican...
that nigga got the exclusive on my punch list...before i
smack u...unplug this lil bitch out of his nasty pulmons...
I bet u a tiny little herb...matter of fact im tired
of playing with this young kid... what are gonna do when
its real...shits on ur pants...nigga is not gangsta...
only appreciation woulda be spittin on the net...nigga like frontin
tryin to be tough u look like an asshole...i say i dont even
got to box u...only need to step up in the ring...ppl sayin u got
murdered...knockOut got this shit possesed... callin out that nigga
def by mouf...gay motherfucker...dont even know what Washington Heights
is...imma go ahead and take this bitch by his neck... really show him
what this is...
im not wasting my time breakin our verse up bitch.. leave... leave and never return
and while your gone learn to rhyme
your verse angers me
i hope you die
vote goes to def by mouf
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[qutoe]Knockout is what this match is soon ta be
Literally my 1-2 punches strike faces and kidneys,
I'm here to tell u simply, what ya mama neva could
u ain't from Dominicana it's nowhere near ya hood
U straight outta loserwood where the homos and dummies like to play,
Sorry did i insult u? that's not what i meant to say
What i really wanna talk about is how bad u fuckin suck
If u ever win a battle anywhere it's becuz of ya luck
U couldn't hit a KnockOut punch if u tried,
Cuz u weaker than a bitch the moment hotflashes arrive
when ya PMS subsides, U can come meet ur demise....
...If u had an advantage in the show u still wouldn't survive,
Def is givin free rides.....Back to ya crib
and not to see u cuz ya mama told me, I got dibs
Take a shot to ya ribs, body and face and see if u don't end up wit more than a scrape
[/quote]
solid rhymes... no KOs or Strong punches... The face thing though... I thought I had heard that before from you so I checked... I didnt see it so I guess its cool...
no offense But I think your shit was week.. bad rhymes... lack of punches...I picture this...full time nerd mothefucka...
talking bout punches hes gonna crunch me get off
my own feet...but betta what that im not dominican...
that nigga got the exclusive on my punch list...before i
smack u...unplug this lil bitch out of his nasty pulmons...
I bet u a tiny little herb...matter of fact im tired
of playing with this young kid... what are gonna do when
its real...shits on ur pants...nigga is not gangsta...
only appreciation woulda be spittin on the net...nigga like frontin
tryin to be tough u look like an asshole...i say i dont even
got to box u...only need to step up in the ring...ppl sayin u got
murdered...knockOut got this shit possesed... callin out that nigga
def by mouf...gay motherfucker...dont even know what Washington Heights
is...imma go ahead and take this bitch by his neck... really show him
what this is...
Bad....
Mouf, although not your best... its good enough by far
V/ Mouf
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