sNoopfox
Jai-Cee
Right the rules are...
10-12 lines, thats 5-6 bars...
No bullshit, no biting, no recycling, no feeding, no dickriding votes either... More personal the better...
Due in 1-2 hours.
Blind drop, so whoever drops there verse first...
Checc in due in 15 mins.
Please Gilbert… Don’t make me merk you…
Lol…
Firstly, were friends, and I know he’s a devout Christian… Not protestant or Catholic. Meh! Nothing personal son…
Opens with a haymaker…
I’m Frustrated and bored, so I thought I’d take an easy conquest…
Coz you’re as good at rhyming……
…… As a one legged man in an ass kicking contest…
If you lose, it won’t matter Snoop, your shit and you don’t have a status…
But remember, Jai-Cee’s that person who officially broke in your anus…
I’ll have sNoopfox praying to God that he come harder in his 5 or 6 bars…
Real unlucky son, but they don’t teach you how to battle in bible class…
So go confess your sins, repent, ask for that utterly divine forgiveness…
But you must have God on your side, if you think you’re going to win this…
Coz when I write in battle, I’d personally say that I’m in my element…
But for your verse to be aggressive, you’d need to bite from the Old testament…
Drop when your ready...
Ouch Jacee! You wounded me deeply; Ye man, You broke me in hard.
Ok I admit You got me praying, "Jesus Repair my heart!" (hah...fool)
I'm A fresher in these battle raps, Excuse me if can't comPETE,
To start with Look at your name JaiCee, you think your black and from the street?
Let me fill in all these other battle rappers, that JaiCee aint black or from the street.
Naa he's just a middle-class, semi rich white boy. Good education. His real names 'Pete'!
And what took you so long to reply huh? Were you Scanning that theasorous?...
An education that mummy paid for don't help!? You'll be alrite man, you see...God IS For us!
You need God More than I do, but the problem is you don't see!
It seems to be a common problem for you friend, like in the mirror when you look, all you See is Black JaiCee!
But now to all who hear, the truth unfolds; Real Truth set you free!
My friend Pete, trapped in his wigga shell, forever he'll remain a Wannabee!
Gone. Like Dust.
Uppin for votes #1
Some feed back would be appreciated.
Can we have a vote please?
This shit ain't funny... Vote... Meh.
snoopfox is way better.
with punchlines like that jai-cee just got his ass smacked
Dat one legged man at da ass kickin contest line craked me up, Jai-Cee! Dat line about u breakin in snoopfoxs anus wuz also good mah homie! Keep it real, aight! Dis one is for you, Jai-Cee!
hey hey can anyone out ther give some more critique on the battle?
Gone. Like Dust.
Uppin #2...
Votes please, they are needed... pretty please...!
Peace...
Uppin #3
Can we have a vote on this..? Rather than just stupid comments...!?
Jai-Cee's verse
I’m Frustrated and bored, so I thought I’d take an easy conquest…
Coz you’re as good at rhyming……
…… As a one legged man in an ass kicking contest…
^a boast and a punch, not very original though^
If you lose, it won’t matter Snoop, your shit and you don’t have a status…
But remember, Jai-Cee’s that person who officially broke in your anus…
^better, you mocked his newness and got a bit of ass-rape in there^
I’ll have sNoopfox praying to God that he come harder in his 5 or 6 bars…
Real unlucky son, but they don’t teach you how to battle in bible class…
^a personal, but the couplet didn't rhyme^
So go confess your sins, repent, ask for that utterly divine forgiveness…
But you must have God on your side, if you think you’re going to win this…
^carrying with that chiristian thing, original, nice multi and more mocking, pretty good^
Coz when I write in battle, I’d personally say that I’m in my element…
But for your verse to be aggressive, you’d need to bite from the Old testament…
^think you should've switched topic here, a biblical reference is quie creative though^
snoopfox
Ouch Jacee! You wounded me deeply; Ye man, You broke me in hard.
Ok I admit You got me praying, "Jesus Repair my heart!" (hah...fool)
^lifting off someone elses verse is a battling no-no, saying this even in joke is a waste of two lines^
I'm A fresher in these battle raps, Excuse me if can't comPETE,
To start with Look at your name JaiCee, you think your black and from the street?
^second line was a weak punch^
Let me fill in all these other battle rappers, that JaiCee aint black or from the street.
Naa he's just a middle-class, semi rich white boy. Good education. His real names 'Pete'!
^you used the same rhymes again and practically recycled the entire content as well, another no-no^
And what took you so long to reply huh? Were you Scanning that theasorous?...
An education that mummy paid for don't help!? You'll be alrite man, you see...God IS For us!
^a multi, the first line was a good one, probably the best in this verse^
You need God More than I do, but the problem is you don't see!
It seems to be a common problem for you friend, like in the mirror when you look, all you See is Black JaiCee!
^2nd line stretched as hell, talking about race again is played man^
But now to all who hear, the truth unfolds; Real Truth set you free!
My friend Pete, trapped in his wigga shell, forever he'll remain a Wannabee!
^and more of the same...^
vote- Jai Cee, although he used the bible lines a lot he still threw some pretty good punches while Snoopfox wasted lines saying he'd been hurt and recycling already dropped lines, something you should never, ever do in a battle verse this short.
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