10-30 Lines
Act smart, you know the rules
10-30 Lines
Act smart, you know the rules
30 'cause Spit looks to gay for a pic battle
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...54#post1839554
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...08#post1839608
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=155103
Last edited by Kaput Mundi; November 19th, 2004 at 03:39 PM
Wewillfuckyouup.......er.
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Last edited by $pitacular; November 19th, 2004 at 11:10 PM
aye yo Kap, good luck my man.
I guess Kap chill in Italy, he might even be roman fa’ real
knew he was foreign…. he always admired migrate skills
kid jus got off my dick… now let’s see how long he stay off
I’ll outlast the battle… while Kap’ll come outlast ‘n the playoffs
hit ‘em 15 times, he stays soft…. n’ buckles to the street
already gotta chip on his shoulder… I jus add a couple to his teeth
fuckin flunkie faggot.... shit he treats losin like a habit
even if Kap put the smackdown.... some other junkie'd grab it
but I give 'em some leeway… he kick it wit rappers, say sources
seen him chillin next to Freeway.... couple bags of oranges
it ain't time to mourn jus.... celebrate when he see me
Kap's the father I always wanted... the kind that never beat me
diss me? the more effort he put forth, I laugh harder
squad dropped 'em, only thing Kap ever murked was bath water
last slaughter, I let 'em live.... this time the stompin's collossal
so Kap holds a watchful eye... after I backhand him wit my fossil
a perfect picture of wackness... let me help you see it clearer
if worst comes to worst.... that'd be Kap runnin to a mirror
look man.... when I dogged his face, I didn't mean it literally
I swear I only called him ugly…... to add insult to injury
shoulda asked me to ghost, obvious I'm comin sweet now
my rhymes are ideal... when ideal Kap a fuckin beat down
didn't kill the pussy... I know how sore his thighs might feel
hit the bitch in his dyed head, watch the new highlights reel
we somewhat similar…. Kap harmonize with nature n’ such
I’m harmonize, nose and chest plate when I punch
low achiever…. wonders why women never flock to ‘em
prolly requirements... as in, Kap requirements to talk to ‘em
fuck it, I know I beat ‘em cuz I went the distance again
& he got a playwright’s talent… always playwright into my hands
Last edited by $pitacular; November 17th, 2004 at 11:44 PM
*plays the E-Dub Chillin track *
…Once again back is the incredible!!
kap let the metal go…Spit falls, I hold the weight
& make your family Sy worse than E. Sermon protégées
plus I know who you are & how your gangsta talk is trash
he the type to act shoddy w/ the wrong Jamaicans
..& get one shoved up his ass
but I turn text to violence...my fist’ll rearrange your frame
& connect ya face w/ a swung dash that’d put the newbiest structure to shame
..fuck it, sample the variety, I use anything to win
except mention flow ‘fore this vato grow home sick again
I’ll let your identity be known, kap play the shady friend
& call Spit by his damn government name…fuckin illegal alien
WAIT he goin audio?! Remind me of Get ‘em high incomplete
‘cause Kayne done succeeded, while you still trying to catch the beat
yet I feel sorry for your dropout ass..sure hope you got the looks
since that heada yours got mo Eyre in it than the fag that wrote the book
you still don’t get it…
I’m the one callin the shots here..might want to avoid confrontation
‘cause, on the real, you ain’t Colin shit like this new Bush administration
I don’t envy you for shit…watching you live in denial
w/ a life story that got the gayest twist since Tye Dye went outta style
& didn’t want to pic battle…seems Mr I’mhard’s afraid
got me tryin to think of a diss
..but all I can remember are those cheapass Target shades
& I can get cash, fold bills & roll mills sloppily
while when it comes to movin papers Spit’s the slowest since bureaucracy
but you know what?
FUCK U RELENTLESS FISTS…aw damn, sorry I miscalled the name
..Nah fuck it man…scratch that…after all you washups are all the same
& you’re my father? Get real Jose your age never been no secret
they say old people have wisdom to share but yours? You can keep it
..done pushed me too far so gruesome is how I react
put a Decker to your temple & watch your brains fade in the Black
ya text sucks, plus you’re an emotional bitch that acts heartless
& I ain’t talkin on cans in sayin you get carried away w/ your garbage
….I I I I don’t care
Wewillfuckyouup.......er.
-me & my man Sav get the bitches quick
inconsiderate conglomerate, I got the sickest click
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Quit usign gay fuckin font...
anyway..
$pit...
kid jus got off my dick… now let’s see how long he stay off
I’ll outlast the battle… while Kap’ll come outlast ‘n the playoffs
fuckin flunkie faggot.... shit he treats losin like a habit
even if Kap put the smackdown.... some other junkie'd grab it
it ain't time to mourn jus.... celebrate when he see me
Kap's the father I always wanted... the kind that never beat me
a perfect picture of wackness... let me help you see it clearer
if worst comes to worst.... that'd be Kap runnin to a mirror
shoulda asked me to ghost, obvious I'm comin sweet now
my rhymes are ideal... when ideal Kap a fuckin beat down
we somewhat similar…. Kap harmonize with nature n’ such
I’m harmonize, nose and chest plate when I punch
vs
Kap
plus I know who you are & how your gangsta talk is trash
he the type to act shoddy w/ the wrong Jamaicans
..& get one shoved up his ass
I’m the one callin the shots here..might want to avoid confrontation
‘cause, on the real, you ain’t Colin shit like this new Bush administration
I don’t envy you for shit…watching you live in denial
w/ a life story that got the gayest twist since Tye Dye went outta style
..done pushed me too far so gruesome is how I react
put a Decker to your temple & watch your brains fade in the Black
I guess quotes say this goes to $pit, he came consistent...$pit, you
used migrate like shit, I was gonna do it, but now I can't...couple of
ok cliche's...couple meh ones..like the chip on the shoulder..and insult
to injury...Kap came ok...came kind of bland to start with mexican jokes
or whatever, the bit about his shades was kind of eh...Tye Dye was
punch of the battle....HR indeed...but not enough..
vote-Spitacular
Just wanted to say... this is the nicest champ match we've had in a while.
Last Word
I must last... word
you could also vote...feedback is appreciated
Wewillfuckyouup.......er.
-me & my man Sav get the bitches quick
inconsiderate conglomerate, I got the sickest click
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he was talking to me.......
before i start breaking down, i wanna say that one of the things i didnt like about ur verse is u overused the word.....word again concept.. where u say the word then repeat it again as wordplay. i wasnt feeling some of those, liked some though. heres my breakdown technique
meh/ blah = hoping it gets better
average = im interested
above average = more interested
good - self explanatory
dope - better than good
I guess Kap chill in Italy, he might even be roman fa’ real
knew he was foreign…. he always admired migrate skills
Good wordplay, but i didnt like the wording... and the setup was blah. i understand how the setup related to migrate - but it seemed way off base, like it really had nothing to do with the battle other than 'migrate'. (kinda like u forced the setup just so it'd have sumthin to do with migrate). above avg line.
kid jus got off my dick… now let’s see how long he stay off
I’ll outlast the battle… while Kap’ll come outlast ‘n the playoffs
outlast .. outlast .. this is what i was talkking about above. u have about 4 other examples of it in ur verse... this one i didnt like especially. avg.
hit ‘em 15 times, he stays soft…. n’ buckles to the street
already gotta chip on his shoulder… I jus add a couple to his teeth
meh
fuckin flunkie faggot.... shit he treats losin like a habit
even if Kap put the smackdown.... some other junkie'd grab it
avg
but I give 'em some leeway… he kick it wit rappers, say sources
seen him chillin next to Freeway.... couple bags of oranges
i mustve missed sumthin, sorry.
it ain't time to mourn jus.... celebrate when he see me
Kap's the father I always wanted... the kind that never beat me
lol. nice line.
diss me? the more effort he put forth, I laugh harder
squad dropped 'em, only thing Kap ever murked was bath water
avg
last slaughter, I let 'em live.... this time the stompin's collossal
so Kap holds a watchful eye... after I backhand him wit my fossil
average
a perfect picture of wackness... let me help you see it clearer
if worst comes to worst.... that'd be Kap runnin to a mirror
above avg
look man.... when I dogged his face, I didn't mean it literally
I swear I only called him ugly…... to add insult to injury
i used this cliche before, doesnt impress me. most cliches dont impressme, there are some though. meh.
shoulda asked me to ghost, obvious I'm comin sweet now
my rhymes are ideal... when ideal Kap a fuckin beat down
above avg.
didn't kill the pussy... I know how sore his thighs might feel
hit the bitch in his dyed head, watch the new highlights reel
almost dope. good. lol
we somewhat similar…. Kap harmonize with nature n’ such
I’m harmonize, nose and chest plate when I punch
good... woulda prolly been dope had u not done the repeat the word technique again and worded differently.
low achiever…. wonders why women never flock to ‘em
prolly requirements... as in, Kap requirements to talk to ‘em
good.
fuck it, I know I beat ‘em cuz I went the distance again
& he got a playwright’s talent… always playwright into my hands
way too many times using this word......same word again technique. but this time was above average. some of these couldve had better effect had u not used it so much tho, but its cool. u had a good verse. and this line woudlve been better worded something like,
an over-achiever, he wants to go the distance again
but sets the stage, and always playwright into my hands
something like that i think wouldve worked a bit better.
ok on to kap..never use that font again. lol.
…Once again back is the incredible!!
kap let the metal go…Spit falls, I hold the weight
& make your family Sy worse than E. Sermon protégées
average.
plus I know who you are & how your gangsta talk is trash
he the type to act shoddy w/ the wrong Jamaicans
..& get one shoved up his ass
average
but I turn text to violence...my fist’ll rearrange your frame
& connect ya face w/ a swung dash that’d put the newbiest structure to shame
newbiest? well, i get the point but... avg.
..fuck it, sample the variety, I use anything to win
except mention flow ‘fore this vato grow home sick again
lol good.
I’ll let your identity be known, kap play the shady friend
& call Spit by his damn government name…fuckin illegal alien
nah
WAIT he goin audio?! Remind me of Get ‘em high incomplete
‘cause Kayne done succeeded, while you still trying to catch the beat
ok.
yet I feel sorry for your dropout ass..sure hope you got the looks
since that heada yours got mo Eyre in it than the fag that wrote the book
meh.
you still don’t get it…
I’m the one callin the shots here..might want to avoid confrontation
‘cause, on the real, you ain’t Colin shit like this new Bush administration
didnt much like the wordplay .. u defintiely put too much of a stretch. colin = callin ? its an O.
I don’t envy you for shit…watching you live in denial
w/ a life story that got the gayest twist since Tye Dye went outta style
cool
& didn’t want to pic battle…seems Mr I’mhard’s afraid
got me tryin to think of a diss
..but all I can remember are those cheapass Target shades
Lol nice.
& I can get cash, fold bills & roll mills sloppily
while when it comes to movin papers Spit’s the slowest since bureaucracy
above avg.
but you know what?
FUCK U RELENTLESS FISTS…aw damn, sorry I miscalled the name
..Nah fuck it man…scratch that…after all you washups are all the same
dope
& you’re my father? Get real Jose your age never been no secret
they say old people have wisdom to share but yours? You can keep it
above avg
..done pushed me too far so gruesome is how I react
put a Decker to your temple & watch your brains fade in the Black
ok
ya text sucks, plus you’re an emotional bitch that acts heartless
& I ain’t talkin on cans in sayin you get carried away w/ your garbage
ok
v/ spit. he came more consistant... above avg while a lot of kap's was average. both had their good lines, i liked this battle. good battle guys
thanks for the feedback.
*edit* oranges explained via PM
Last edited by $pitacular; November 18th, 2004 at 05:41 PM
Originally Posted by $pitacular
overall
spit won...he had 3 good couplets...kap had 1 decent couplet...kap's shit needs better werdin...lines had too many werds which took away from tha punches...and kap...u need to stop usin so many punches that play on how werds sound...that wuz like 4-5 couplets where u used that style and it got annoyin and lost its effectiveness due to so many...1-2 is coo but 5 is overkill...and also that chip on ur shoulder is played as well as tha insult to injury...but u still pulled out tha win due to a poor verse from kap...
vote=spit
1Ne
Last edited by I'm Jay Cee; November 19th, 2004 at 11:38 AM
I think he means, Vote: Spit.
Now my view of Spit's best...
fuckin flunkie faggot.... shit he treats losin like a habit
even if Kap put the smackdown.... some other junkie'd grab it
it ain't time to mourn jus.... celebrate when he see me
Kap's the father I always wanted... the kind that never beat me
last slaughter, I let 'em live.... this time the stompin's collossal
so Kap holds a watchful eye... after I backhand him wit my fossil
didn't kill the pussy... I know how sore his thighs might feel
hit the bitch in his dyed head, watch the new highlights reel
we somewhat similar…. Kap harmonize with nature n’ such
I’m harmonize, nose and chest plate when I punch
And Kap's...
plus I know who you are & how your gangsta talk is trash
he the type to act shoddy w/ the wrong Jamaicans
..& get one shoved up his ass
yet I feel sorry for your dropout ass..sure hope you got the looks
since that heada yours got mo Eyre in it than the fag that wrote the book
I’m the one callin the shots here..might want to avoid confrontation
‘cause, on the real, you ain’t Colin shit like this new Bush administration
I don’t envy you for shit…watching you live in denial
w/ a life story that got the gayest twist since Tye Dye went outta style
& I can get cash, fold bills & roll mills sloppily
while when it comes to movin papers Spit’s the slowest since bureaucracy
That's Spit taking it by one bar...
Cuz even though I highlighted the "Eyre" line by Kap...for good effort...
It was flawed by facts...a fag didn't write Jane Eyre, a bitch did, Charlotte Bronte.
Plus, I thought Spit just delivered the harder shit...
Spit wins
Good battle though!
Last edited by Born To Kill; November 19th, 2004 at 10:18 AM
I think he does too....
Wewillfuckyouup.......er.
-me & my man Sav get the bitches quick
inconsiderate conglomerate, I got the sickest click
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I agree here....except you mean vote= SPIT
spit just had the better verse imo....his flow was good...sometimes poor word choice... i dunno wasnt really feeling some of the lines:
kid jus got off my dick… now let’s see how long he stay off
I’ll outlast the battle… while Kap’ll come outlast ‘n the playoffs
fuckin flunkie faggot.... shit he treats losin like a habit
even if Kap put the smackdown.... some other junkie'd grab it
last slaughter, I let 'em live.... this time the stompin's collossal
so Kap holds a watchful eye... after I backhand him wit my fossil
if worst comes to worst.... that'd be Kap runnin to a mirror
^^ that was coo too
kap just had a bunch of long lines that out did the strength of some of the lines he used.
yet I feel sorry for your dropout ass..sure hope you got the looks
since that heada yours got mo Eyre in it than the fag that wrote the book
& I can get cash, fold bills & roll mills sloppily
while when it comes to movin papers Spit’s the slowest since bureaucracy
& you’re my father? Get real Jose your age never been no secret
they say old people have wisdom to share but yours? You can keep it
i liked there personally
not a bad battle..both coulda put more into it..since so many lines were written..
vote = spit
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