Intro: The Begining

[Brace4impact]

----See what had happen was My last drop was some shit.....So I decided that it was time to step it up and see what I can Do...Im Not going to take my time And over think every thing...Im just going to Flow....I like to write as if im writting a Book, or a movie ...so this is Befor the story starts------

''I've seen so many people turn their heads to stay Satisfied''
''But they cant find a reason to Their Lives''
''Im On My Way''
''Im ON My Way''

The first days Here .....to me was a mystery
Simply nothing...And then just became history
Quicky Running....Away from My memorys
Drowding Visions..with Sex, weed and Henecey \
Nightmairs Rissen..from parents Addictions
Then I can Only mencion...my own rendention
Of Events pictured...I Cant Even remimber
Leaving Miniture scars...Baby Bottle Tempiture \
"So Hot''..She couldent see the Melting Nipple
Its Not her Fought.....Cuz' My Moms Not Simple
She just Got Cought....By drugs and their Potional
Bakeing soda rocks...Cooked in pots and Utencils...
Why else would I Grab A Pad and a Pencil..... \
As Soon as I learned....Enough of the Alphabet
Only To write My pops in the pin...Whos not out yet
And wont Be In'till Im around Ten...And Past depressed...
A decade Past I Had.....To Contemplate My Death...
Took My last breath .....Said My peace and Confessed
But then I had a Little Brother..who I need To Protect..
A message I Guess ... From God 'that... I need to survive
Be strong And not Cry..Calm To Provide...Not Long till u Die
Then I meet a Lady Named Hip-Hop to take me along for a ride \
Made me strive for my goals...As I soaked In her Lesson....
Showed me a Road to Travel..thrown Through battles...
Know you Know the Story Behind..The man that Glows In Shadows \\]

[Willy B]

bro that was aiight the stucture was good.
but the lyrics sort of seemed simple
but good work
there wasnt any lines that really hit me but if you were jus flowin it aiight man

return the love
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=153700

[TemporarySpastic]

hold up young buck....it says you're 10 yrs. old drownin' visions in sex, weed, and some henny.

"Only To write My pops in the pin...Whos not out yet
And wont Be In'till Im around Ten...And Past depressed...
A decade Past I Had.....To Contemplate My Death..."

actually, by the sounds of it you're younger than 10. and i don't know anyone with that kind of vocab. at the age of 10. it sounds like you took some songs and did a remix of all of them. it sounds familiar, the verse does i mean. elevate and come up with some original stuff off the top of your dome kid...i could be wrong. correct me if i am.

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

[mindone]

Tell you the truth i thought it was good, the only thing was what he said about the age 10 thing but, i didnt think the simplicity mattered what so ever. I thought it was good either way, but thats my opinion.
I think its alright to make things simple when your talkin about stuff like that, because why would you wanna make a life thats already so unsimple that much unsimpler. Then people that dont go through that prolly wont relate at all and wont like it. But i definitally appreaciate it.

[Johnny 6-feet]

i thought the last two lines were the strongest in this piece. a good story-telling flow and strong subject matter makes this piece stand out. you created some good imagery here as well. the vocab and multis werent as present here but the strengths of this piece make up for that.

a good drop, keep posting and elavating like you say. youre on the path to illness man.

p.s. if you could rep one of my pieces i'd appricaite it.

[Brace4impact]

Mixed reactions.....Thats supose to happen with music...
First Off im 19, I was expressing were I was At emotionaly When I was 10...
I've grown past that.... thats why Its Called : The begining....
I choose to keep it simple and I actually wrote it as fast as I could...
'The Song was about how things were at the start of my life and how
I grew because of The birth of my little Brother and My Discoverty of
Rap Music.....Which In Turn, would change How I saw The world ,
And would eventually Take me away From a sure path to Distruction...
Sometimes you shouldent think of things so Complex when It can all be
Described By Simple Words'.......NEWTESTAMENT*
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...47#post1809447
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=153700

[Brace4impact]

Last Time Uping . Let Me Get Some Feed Back....Plz
I liked this Piece let Me know what Up...
How Can I elevate....

[Brace4impact]

Can I plz Get some more feed back .. thank to those who have all ready left posts
I will be sure to check out those threads ......................UPIN MOTHA`F***ER