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  1. #1
    krazee
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    dont sleep on this

    bullets bust out my 45, when i creep through
    pulling 5 miles an hour, comin up beside you
    you standing at the bus stop, cuz ya whip got took
    pullin up next to you, n you dont look
    you wanna run but ya think ya legs would brake
    hear the hammer lock back, now you wanna peak
    but it aint that little hand gun, its the nuke
    one to cause a big explosion and make ya puke
    from the lack of blood to ya brain, you go weak
    your thinkin is too slow, next thing ya know
    finger on the trigger, pulled back n let go

    this mainframe has a virus, insane thought of mind
    but im rapping on, type in one but im doin 2 lines
    one gives me a stress releif, other speeds up time
    slangin out rocks so i can afford this yay of mine
    put the straw in my nose and have my brain smother
    smother like the brain of your mother
    you better remind her to get me my fuckin cheddar
    cuz i can be a killa ova nuthin, but this just gives me a reason for the better




    feed bakk on this..dont just look at it n ignore it...either give me props or tell me whuts wrong wit it

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...d.php?t=1759849
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=150240

  2. #2
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    not bad man. i thought it was pretty good, only think i would suggest if you ever plan on actually recording is cahnge this line,
    "but im rapping on, type in one but im doin 2 lines"
    if thats type in as in typing then i would change it cause ona song your not gonna wanna say how your typing maybe just say spittin one or somethin. other htat its a fairly nice peace. as for the feedback thing return the favor man i've got 3 on here and only ones been replied to once...
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=150636
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=150437
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=150288
    at least hit one of these for me man...peace

  3. #3
    I'm Bakk!
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    WestCoast
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    17-9
    Flow was off in parts but you new so keep ELEVATING........

  4. #4
    krazee
    Guest
    you thnx for the feed bakk...ne more let me know

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