Litmus Test...(Test Of Purity)

[R. Frost]

crouched in a corner of committed suicide..
A thousand screams of shattered glass reflect our past...
In a slience of sililoques...and sweet silhouettes..
Broken past my fractured heart..never to be mend again...
Chained to a pond of memory in my mind..
Aside it...the voice of thought ripple it's surface ,
Like blue scarfs whipping in the wind...
backflashes enter my mind like the steps of psychic insight..
Unable to fight tears they roll down the cliffs of my cheeks..
Crashing in to more boulders...

Seeping thru the walls the souls of nostalgia..
The hands of time point onward but I cannot leave...
Your ghost is forever upon my shoulders like
The weight of your sudden absence...
Who would of thought something so quick
Could hurt for so long..
We were meant to be or so it seemed..
is happiness but a worm that blossoms to sorrow..?
Or have i misjudged the whispers of the touchstone in my heart?
I used to think,..you know.. us..?
Was the purest love ever to be felt..
But what is love unless it's mutual..
How can love be mutual with a spirit..
i brought you flowers the other day..I sang..
But..Did u hear it..
i guess i'm supposed to have faith...
Another impalpable submission..
I was saved by the hands of YouR grace
And wasn't there at your last breath..
Not even there to listen..
They say the thing you think about the most when you die..
Is what you will return to when you cross..
Well...I'm thinking of you now..
I take it you already know my next thought..
Drinking the unprescribed elexir..so keep the doors open..
Just to wake up in some unowned white garments..
I'm in denial to the litmus test of this loves purity..
but no matter how hard i try n fake
The next time i'll kiss you will be in memory
Love.

not really a rhyme scheme to this but not needed in poetry

[Prince Escobar]

I was amazed at the incrediibly well written imagery in the first stanza, from there on you had me hooked, this could have been 3 pages long...another part that really gripped me was "I used to think,..you know.. us..?
Was the purest love ever to be felt..
But what is love unless it's mutual.."
captivating piece, 1luv.

[R. Frost]

Thanks Man Much Appricitated

[Endeva.]

well man, this wasnt really my sort of thing, buit i can see it was written as it should have been, a nice feel through the whole thing, the emotion was there and the imagery was nice, all round i cant really judge cos it aint my forte, but i thought it was decent.... 1

[R. Frost]

Uppin... and thanks for the feedback dev

[DALC]

This was really good.
Everything was basically fine and well written but im thanking you for giving me my
new favorite word:nostalgia.But anyways good poem,keep writing.

[R. Frost]

thanks man upping for some more votes and im drunk right now so i would really appriciate it if someone would leave some feedback

[shawty"B"]

i like this peice a lot. It was a beautiful peice. There was obvioulsy a lot of emotion out into every line. And the imagery in this was good. I was drawin into the poem from the very first line the the very last. I love how you ended this poem Over all: I think that you have made a really good peice right here.

.........fav part...........



crouched in a corner of committed suicide..
A thousand screams of shattered glass reflect our past...
In a slience of sililoques...and sweet silhouettes..
Broken past my fractured heart..never to be mend again...
Chained to a pond of memory in my mind..


keep droppin



....bless

[L.I.]

That was awesome...very very good...imagery was amazing...you dealt well witht he topic and it turned out to be a great piece...very nice

[God.]

Wow, really nice piece. It was dep, involved, good word choice, imagery was incredible. Really nice job here. I loved the imagery most of all. Keep elevatin'.

[R. Frost]

thanks man uppin for a couple more peoples opnions