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Thread: Dreamers (My Best Piece)

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    Dreamers

    ~*~ Dreamers ~*~

    How soon this life takes memories,
    And turns sweetness to despair,
    They fall, like mighty waves,
    Upon the burdens that we bare.

    It's not wise to be a fool too long,
    Too long in dreaming still,
    It's hard to face reality,
    Heart fights against brain's will.

    A wiser mind claims memories,
    And sketches them to gray,
    Obscuring hues with daunted breath,
    Then buries them away.

    And if you do not listen,
    And you hear only a sweet song,
    You then are praying so in vain,
    While hanging onto memories long!

    Soon smiling through tormented tears,
    And understanding feign,
    Your arms still in devotion fold,
    To stifle out your pain.

    At last you hold a looking glass,
    To feeble your ways of old,
    But the crumpling child inside you,
    Wishes you had never told.

    How soon this life breaks dreamers,
    And how foolish can they be,
    To let sorrow their companion stay,
    Life's hard on dreamers such as me!
    Last edited by Reeco; September 19th, 2004 at 10:33 AM

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    This was really a real nice poem.
    i didn't see nothing wrong with this peice Time. The whole concept of this poem was that,
    it was telling you to express yourself thouroughly, and thats,
    exactlt what you did. your flow was there, structure was cool,
    and you stuck with very good content. overall, this turned out really well.
    nice. keep doing what you do and dont stop.


    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=145918

    Return.....Thanx.

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    ummmmmmm up

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    This was one of the most beautiful peices I have read in a while. I loved the way you took such simple things and worded them so eloquently and in such an unique style. You had me pulled in from the first set of lines....the emotion was great, flow was poetically sound, structure was good. The overall creativity was nice. Also the vocab used was a great way to illustrate your emotions on a deeper level. Imagery was great as well. Some of my favorite lines: Should I extend my vision across the cirrus sky?
    A fossil of Forever caught within a dreamer’s eye.

    Passion become the principle, and pain a way of life,
    I gave my soul to Misery; I loved her as a wife.
    I thought myself invincible, took comfort in her cold.
    ‘Twas there I bought my destiny, the rest of me I sold

    To, if by Fate, or polished hand, revere the cirrus sky,
    Should morning come to share a dance lost to this dreamer’s eye.


    Really nice drop. Keep it up

    peace,
    Mez

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    its a nice piece shame its bitten

    http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum55/HTML/000784.html
    yeah i'm sick and blood dont you know it

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    timeless you better be that person on the other site....
    Bittersweet

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    well after reading...both...numebr one timeless you always use that openign lien about the cirrus sky...either you're the same person or you were biting that dude's concepts...these poems are quite dif...jus a similar concept....which isnt exactly biting...
    Bittersweet

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    Whats going on?
    I read this,feedback mesmerize left contained to quotes of lyric,
    But i dont see those lyrics in the poem posted..On the link,that poem
    contains the exact lines quoted by mesmerize,indicating that the poem
    now in this forum was not the original one posted,but changed to
    cover up the reality of it being bitten..

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    no doubt...um this isnt the exact poem i replied to. hmmm..i dunno....wait, that poem in that link sik flow posted is the exact one i replied to on here but then it was changed.

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    aww timeless tried to pass off another's work as his own and changed it when he got caught....for shame..."smacks timeless*
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    wow that site kicks ass....i wanna join
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    oooooh.
    cought biting..

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    wow..i searched throughh the site and found more poems by micheal anderson that timeless posted on this site...liek please, dad...for insatnce..ill make a full list
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    http://www.netpoets.com/poems/sad/0004030.htm the please dad link..word for fuckin word...

    timeless had better be micheal anderson....
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    wow it looks like he did bit

    Poethics Roster names
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=142357
    his real name is Adam

    And The Pics and the age aint the same

    As This Mr. Anderson

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