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    For Katie (R.I.P - 2nd June 1985 - 28th August 2004)

    For Katie
    Written By Timeless :'-(

    Eternity calls with natures bliss taking emotion by force
    With a tainted vision and silhouette heart renders quiet remorse
    Of course a withering leaf, raped and lies naked on ground
    A silence bound with eerie essence, ciphers existence sound
    Soul's rise to the skies, where evaporating angels are formed
    The clouds of pure sunrise, only take Hearts when love's called
    The waters rage and tenderness begins to sleep in eternal rest
    And in a vest of emotion and wisdom are the havens truly blessed
    I must confess the mountains move my soul in tranquil rendered words
    Sound of the trees and birds serenade into galaxy’s and other worlds
    The air we breath, the words we write, are of poetic splendour
    Our lips that talk, Our given sight, pushes gods into surrender
    And tender hearts begin to love, pure as angels, graceful as doves
    I wait forever in a vivid deneuve, to see my angel fall from above
    I sit forever On a graceful throne, waiting for my perfect queen
    But i know deep in my soul, She’s gone into silent dreams
    She’s in all the things I’ve said, trees, water, highest mountain tops
    other people, golden streams, she’s in my heart, so it will never stop.

    ~::~ R.I.P Babe ~::~
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    up....please reply...I WILL RETURN FAVOURS

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    yo this was a powerful peice. the flow was insane, or maybe i was jus feelin it personally. But the vocab was on point, fo real, it words were well placed and served their purpose. good writin
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    I really loved this peice Timeless..you really conveyed a lot of emotion in this. The imagery used was very vivid and the vocab used seemed to be the perfect word choice. The tone and flow to this was very smooth and soothing. Ive seen a lot of people write to this kind of topic, and I dont think Ive seen anyone yet who has done it anything like you have. Very nice peice.

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    this shit was incredible the emotion and flow were incredible i enjoyed this without question and i wish a R.I.P. to Katie as well. Good shit man.

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    ^^ wow so you decided to come out of the shadows, nice to see ya man...and thanks everyone for the replys so far!

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    powerful..yeah, thats true. but it just seemed to stop.. i dunno, i wasn't brought to tears by this, as i have almost been before by some of the real emotional writings..the thing that hit me most was the imagry..how do you do it? That was some wordplay there Timeless. And if you wanted people to feel this..then i think the use of 'babe' spoiled it for me, it seemed too casual..i dunno...it was a great piece though..your use of vocab is outstanding..and i hope katies happy in heaven.
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    wow......this was truely a great peice. You put the perfectwords in just the right spot. and the emotion in this was amazing.... although this just isnt like your normal style of writting this is an awsome peice. i think you did a wonderful job in this and im sorry that you lost someone that close to you.... Im sure that katie has heard you as you wrote this, and will forever watch over you and stand by your side to guide you....

    ....fav part.....

    She’s in all the things I’ve said, trees, water, highest mountain tops
    other people, golden streams, she’s in my heart, so it will never stop.

    keep droppin


    ....God Bless

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    just before i get banned, this wasnt bit!

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    I don't care if this wasn't bit, you are a piece of shit man, I hope one day you will learn to be a man and a poet, but as a poet myself I could never respect you again. What you did goes againt every thing a true poet stand for, you raped the art man, you do not derserve any credit or respect here on this site or for any kind of poetry. I WILL CLOSE EVERYTHING YOU EVER POSTED ON RB!

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