Lucky Seven's(Greatest piece I have ever written)

[Brother Blue Collar]

grammer damnit grammer does no one on the net possess great grammer in they peices

"read" should be "reads" infact the whole shi-bang should be in present tense especially if it's in a story type of mode(that's just how i feel)

damn your public school knowledge

" sanctuary as whole" should "as a whole"

bad wording atleast to me
"fathom only" would have read betta as "only fathom so much......."

dope line i like the wordplay
"To depart this horror, to run home but the coach says to bunt"


you a great writer but work on ya grammer damnit if this was audio it would matter just the same
" our stomach" should have been "our stomachs"

ya grammer was the only real prob with this peice fix that and i'll nominate cuz it is dopeness

[Sublime D]

i forgot to check for tense....thas true....tht's the only error

[spokenoh]

If this loses credentials because of that, it is gay. No one loses respect of Nas or Rakim because they used "tooken" instead of "taken". It's "grammar", not "grammer". Usually you aren't gay like this, Urban.

[Sublime D]

lmfao at urban spelling grammar wrong 5 times

[Brother Blue Collar]

If this loses credentials because of that, it is gay. No one loses respect of Nas or Rakim because they used "tooken" instead of "taken". It's "grammar", not "grammer". Usually you aren't gay like this, Urban.

wrong my man wrong i spelled "grammer" wrong to stress the point, plus by "grammer" i also mean the fact when you used plurals but forget to put the s, name me one emcee who has ever done that????

and i still said it was a dope peice meaning in my eyes it didn't lose any credentials cuz i know people don't always use correct "grammer" in the shit that they write, usually it's to get people to relate to it more, but i didn't think that's what you doing plus i pointed out other stuff than that. stop bitching about "grammetically" wrong errors and besides you know i'm just jealous


and sublime shut up damnit

you guys both know with me it's all love and no hate

[spokenoh]

I love you too. Now...get in my shorts. Up.

[Chemarim]

saw this linked in top ten pics, i can see why

good shit, an nice that you picked to write about it cuz i wouldnt' of, i see that sometimes wen im driving with people an feel bad cuz shit i can't do nuttin an i aint got no money to give, even though i get money without a job i need it my self.

besides that good vocab-word structure
you didnt' key it up to be something to flowy but jus a writin.
good shit overall.

[spokenoh]

Thanks. Up.

[Chris Black]

This was some straight shit. The topice when it started had been done before, but you did it well, but then I think you started to wonder more. You started based on a specific case in reality but then started to wonder mentally into a more abstract vision. This was an above average peace. Decent read. Keep doing you, homie.

-W1

[spokenoh]

Thanks.