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    Poisoned Fetus

    a teenage woman in relationships with a grown man
    so weak he couldn’t take her matters in his own hands
    its so damn fucked up, he couldn’t get the message
    and beat her daily when he found out that the chick was pregnant
    they started stressin for the fetus and there weak existence
    didn’t say gods name in vein but put a needle in it
    soon enough they tried crack and started snortin coke,
    coulda kilt the kid but they smoked up the abortion doe
    9 months pass, shit get worse in a abandoned complex
    soon to be ruins of some old and badly damaged projects
    there was no heat on the stove and they were frozen cold
    then he seen his women pissin when her fuckin water broke
    then the contractions and her screaming like her hole was snappin
    but a quarter and a dime aint what he was known for havin
    somebody heard the scream and helped them in this crazy world
    10 hours later..mom and father had a baby girl...

    Lovely little kid, beautiful, for sure contaminated
    a crack baby so addicted, badly elevated
    moms was killed during birth, pops is devestated
    he left the room more surprised than an exclamation
    escape the hospital fiending, yo he gotta have it
    soon killed by a dealer just for robbin stashes
    the kids parentless there’s only one option
    leave her up to dyfuss to put up for adoption
    now adopted..the circle spends i hear the echo
    to a family that lives away but near the ghetto
    girl was smart..just a innocent kid
    who got nice awards for honor roll and citizenship
    missed perfect attendance because she was sick
    still thought about college..she roughly was six
    six years later, she met a boy in her life
    moving to fast..the darkness steady poisons her light...

    Learned sex education..got her First period
    they shoulda watched her closely and took my words serious
    three years later she was stll with the kid
    gettin high, drinking liquor gettin ill with the biz
    then the sudden urge for cocaine was still in her ribs
    and her boyfriend used, he was killin the shit
    going in abandoned buildings to sniff..jesus!
    They stop fuckin when her friend didn’t come and see her
    she was then banished from the home she was planned in
    then her man did the magic trick, that niggah vanished
    a pregnant single mother understood that shit was major
    so she walked the street sellin ass to get the paper
    another crack baby born into some hard labor
    who’s mother was killed by a man who tried to rape her
    it destroyed her dreams kid, so avoid the weakness
    its fucked up when you resurrect a poisoned fetus
    Last edited by Marek; September 14th, 2004 at 04:50 PM

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    NONCENTZ AKA WORD~PERFECT noncentz's Avatar
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    yo son im feeling this ish the graphic nature of the topic and the expression of ur mind without blaintenly saying it in words just line direction this is hot stay up
    to love something,is to die for it ,if you do, your a martyr , but these days music is morbid, false carters ..prohet's for prophet no lie, look how our last martyr was crucified. to put it in it symplicity, you aint true...you wouldnt sacrifice a few dollars for authenticity..

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    Good shit. Flow was ill the first two verses, got a little choppy in part of the third. The ittle wordplay mixed in was a nice touch. The imagery was ill, and the overall story was nice. This was an enjoyable read. Keep up the good work.

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    i like this...this was good...im impressed...just passing along the info...a roster spot is open in divine diction...this is what i wanted to see from you..i loved ur shorts...btu i ahd to see hwo you did in a logn piece, and im impressed...this was good...very nice...

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    Yo this was sick man. I was feelin everything especially how you went the whole lil cycle I thought u was gon stop when the parents died but this was hot and the concept the flow kept throwing me off but thats liteweight cause i'm reading it but keep it up it was good

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