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    Write To This Picture XVI

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    ~Disgraced Leaves~



    Contorted limbs seen in the foreground of a crooked face
    Define the landscape of this political race, in otherwords
    Disgraced leaves tend to grow aimlessly about, in doubt
    As a Body of astronomic wealth our seed is our only clout
    Soiled tainted & stained have we drained our young viens?
    What secrets to life, hold those that we pay to entertain?
    Bare minds or bare arms? Lack of information brings harm
    Truth sounds the Alarm, words like flesh are emensely bent
    Fabrication's evident, much the same as hollywood breasts
    Our Political Junk yards stock pile a mountain of broken men
    Tokens spent in the pursuit of power.............................
    .................................................a nd prestiege of trend


    Last edited by Bounce; August 31st, 2004 at 07:30 PM

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    a melding of physical glory
    eternal tale of the human story
    rapturous bliss likened to happiness
    only relief from the mental abyss
    closest expirience for man of God
    ephemeral break from life's facade
    spirit, body, and mind intertwined
    every thought of all falls behind
    demuring to the call of the divine
    transcendent joy, objective prime
    blessed action beyond space or time
    primal attraction innundates the mind
    mental distraction, selfish love, be mine
    my enjoyment ranks above yours in line
    you wretched whore, i implore your resources
    to flourish and fill me gorishly, while i bore through thee
    my sword is never sheathed, until you're completely devoid of energy
    bow to me, fall down to your knees, pleasure me, but you shall never suceed
    insatiable, i am, i am man, you are the scarifice, you are my lamb, at my command
    i dam your waters, take down your herds in slaughters, bastardizing your products,
    your suns and daughters, your trees and leaves, synthesizing any of these
    sympathizing not with your needs, taking more than i need to eat or breathe
    die, wretched bitch, i love to rape thee, and how you berate me
    and think that you can escape me...flooding and quaking
    but only yourself are you breaking, quit faking
    i see your skin, it's increasingly flaking
    i see your kin, mine for the taking
    not until we're through
    i shall remain true
    mother nature..
    I need you...
    Last edited by Sublime D; August 31st, 2004 at 08:14 PM
    Bittersweet

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    bounce your piece was very good...succinct without being terse...a good mixture of intelligence and common sense with an ultimately human compassion for the deceiving of your fellow man...

    9.0/10...could have been more, you sold that piece a lil short...(bloom said we can reply in here)

    8.4/10 on the sublime scale (my personal scale based on what i know of your talent and what you're capable of)
    Bittersweet

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    ^I hate the Sublime scale
    Bounce you had a nice piece. Made me think. A good mixture of emotion and hardships of life.
    Sublime yours was nice...really deep with intelect and emotion. Well done


    Kicked out of Eden

    Visions are slowly blurred as lonely figures merge into the sand
    Melting desert heat burns through all, dehydration is at hand
    Contorted bodys sink in the earth, while Eve's prayers rise up
    God turns his head, as human shows first signs of bein corrupt
    Human fault is inevitable, Their first test against temptation
    Eve lured Adam to trouble, impossible to ever repay him
    So he left her all alone, to let her vanish in Gods creation
    Evaporate in the heat, in complete solitude. Desolation
    Absolute Isolation, all she can do is think. Contemplate
    Left with only his leaf, for her to remember her mistakes
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