The Poet, The Pen

[Reeco]

The Poet, The Pen
Written By Timeless

If you were but a poet
And I were but your pen
Enjoined in weaving tapestries
Please tell me, now, what then
Could we write our destiny
The poet and the pen
Embellish all our fantasies
Find love time and again

Would we sail the seven seas
To find the pirates lair
Or ride upon the noblest steeds
Pluck stars out of the air
Could we fathom ocean’s depths
Explore the coral reefs
Climb Tibetan mountain peaks
Hold firm in our beliefs

Or simply with the sands of time
Would all my ink run dry
Would you release me from your hands
Put down your head and sigh
Would we close our chapter
Would all our dreams be lost
Would all the pages then go blank
As white as winter’s frost

Would we simply be no more
The poet or the pen
Would your muse then lose her voice
To never sing again
But if we wrote our ending
Seems despite the best laid schemes
We’d somehow find each other
If only in our dreams

[Reeco]

LINK TO ONE PIECE - http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=138777

[Moniker]

well done. this was incredible. it had the perfect combination of simplicity and complexity. the structure you used worked perfectly, and i liked the rhyme scheme you used. the imagery was amazing. and the story stayed on point throughout. i think this is probobly the best piece ive seen from you. great job.

[Foreshadow]

This was really good Timeless. You had alot of inspirational lines and alot of good image-ry. Details were good I picked up everything you said nice job.

[Prince Escobar]

^agreed this piece was simply poetry in it's purest, the simplicity of it was the biggest impact of it, the simplicity of the scheme and word choice made it incredibly powerful because every single word seemed to be perfectly placed. The flow of it was also incredible, possibly the best flow i've seen in this forum for a long time, i saw no flaws in the scheme word choice or flow it was all together. The story too was incredible and the imagery provided a stunning backdrop for the poem, i was able to visualize the pirate lairs the coral reef and the peaks of tibetan mountains. This piece is simply wonderful, my only complaint is that it lacked a certain aspect to make it legendary, but it was a perfect read and a perfect poem just not soo overwhelmingly amazing that it will be legendary but please don't be discouraged, this is by far the best poem i've read for you and one of the best simple ones i've seen on the net, congratulations and please continue to drop, you just made me a fan lol, 1luv.

[Madd Preacher]

this poem was aiight....ur imagination was cool...to me it seemed like a mother goose nersery rhyme...you had some nice lines....
the imagery was cool...i thought that Or ride upon the noblest steeds
Pluck stars out of the air
.....was pretty cool...the ending with the meet eachother is a lil played though....so wasnt too special to me....overall good drop

igido

[spokenoh]

^ You are a first-class idiot.

This was magnificent, unbelievably incredible. Greatest work I have ever seen from you, this was a transformation that I wouldn't expect from you. I have never envied someone else's work, but this piece makes me cringe with jealousy. Seriously, I am lost of words.
Imagery is beautifully crafted, added with double metaphors, hyperboles, and every other sound device I can think of. The imagery was greater than actually seeing the poem in actuality. This was detailed, descriptive.

"Or simply with the sands of time
Would all my ink run dry
Would you release me from your hands
Put down your head and sigh
Would we close our chapter
Would all our dreams be lost
Would all the pages then go blank
As white as winter’s frost"

Best stanza in my opinion. Very philosophical and deep in thought
The metaphors were in a plethora of a supply, adding to the originality of this poem. You are sensational with words, I think this should be published. Best metaphorical lines:

"Enjoined in weaving tapestries
Please tell me, now, what then
Could we write our destiny
The poet and the pen
Embellish all our fantasies
Find love time and again"

The meter in this was astonishly as perfect as mine usually is, which flowed with poetic brilliance. Everything was laid out like a script in the palm of my hand with excellency. You definitely earned my respect for your writing as you proved that you could establish perfect meter on a site that barely uses it.

This was very imaginative, and explored the realms of your conscious. The rhyme scheme was very different, original and creative, embodying what I like to see in the Poetic Scriptures forum. Amazing, the structure was pretty to the eyes and wasn't forced.

This should be published.Peace and if you have time, hit up, "Where Im At".
Thanks.

[Reeco]

all of you thank you soooo much and Pinacle wow bro, thanks for the breakdown..................anyway someone nominate this for legands lol................uppin

[Bloom.Quist]

Twas very good. But legends? Not sure...it seems yall hype this to more than it really is, but hey just my opinion. Great story, life through the eyes of a poet. The whole idea of it was great. Everything flowed nicely, seemed very free with emotion. Good piece, better than most of ures.

[shawty"B"]

i loved this! it was a wonderful peice. not like alot of the types of
poems that you see around here. it was a nice change. i like the
flow and the structure of this, very simplistic, yet in a way complex.
the emoton in this was quite different, but awsome.

........fav part.........

If you were but a poet
And I were but your pen
Enjoined in weaving tapestries
Please tell me, now, what then
Could we write our destiny
The poet and the pen
Embellish all our fantasies
Find love time and again

keep droppin
return the favor

....bless

[Reeco]

up................................................ ..

[bornspokenword]

I love when the 'pen' is personified...
definately my favorite object in this crazy world

a powerful image...

what ever happened to our topical battle, by the way?
anyhow...
keep puttin quill to paper Timeless...

[Reeco]

ok thank you uppin............prob for the last time