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    My perspective

    Im tetherd down on a weatherd mound
    Just waiting the day, for the heaven sound
    A post in the ground, and a woven rope
    My stolen hope, When i just want to go n' elope...
    With someone to tope. But no. Visitors stare
    Tip their hat and reveal their hair, They dont care
    As i revolve in my lair, Resting in ones eyes
    Strangers left tounge tied, but your sons deprived
    And I wonder why..?
    And i hear my call, you remember the heavenly sound?
    Back in the day when i was tetherd down...
    On a weathered mound...
    Well the angles sang, and along came a mangled gang
    Of spirts and abnormalties leaping and jangled with fame
    My ankle in pain, from the sudden drop in a crater
    I glided to my feet, to get a chance to gain gray fur
    I was wearing away at this age for sure, but at what precision
    Every second, no every moment i could feel age make an incision
    Forevever and a minute, I was tortured but now revealed
    Not only am i gods son, But im also been healed
    If he can revive you with fear, then expand your ability with meer fame
    Well then he doesnt need my help, all you need to know is I came
    But at what price, so i could teach and reveal those masked
    And leave the cast, with questions forever not asked
    So you can munipulate with hacks, and expand the slack
    Develope these common knacks, of changes
    When you cant change certain things that dont need changing
    Look im on pictures you have hanging, but really...
    You dont beleive in what i was saying...Its silly
    All of these materials for the publics eye
    Makes me want to drop and cry
    Because Ive seen War mongers wear crosses
    When we will never except them when they die.

    Get the picture, You might live in a material religion
    But just because youve relised were here
    doesnt mean youll be forgiven
    Scytsophrenia

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    Well Grotesque this was decent all round. Good internal usage etc
    You word your pieces well which is why I always give them a peep
    I guess. Your flow was on point due to the multis being placed in
    perfect locations thru-out the drop.
    On to the piece itself.. your message I've seen b4 but you are developing
    the venting side very well. It was kinda basic but due to your own
    personal belief in religion/war it gave it a fresh look to it..
    Nice work.

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    using lyrical wars to rip the mic.

    -Some white guy.

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    You know I should close this since in your last couple pieces you didnt leave links but im a nice guy, So get the links of feedback.

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    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...58#post1572158

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...53#post1572153
    And credz hop off my dick lol...im rebelling because i leave feedbck and never get more then 3-5 replys....And Akwai Tance when i switched names i figured noone would know who i used to be....How do you know?
    Scytsophrenia

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    Damn this was a nice piece Topic. You had a great rhyme scheme behind the whole topic which made everything in the piece stick out very well. You also had some real nice image-ry it drew a real nice picture in my head which helped me follow along very well. Your details were nice you didnt seem to ever repeat yourself which is a plus. This was very well done topic you kept me interested the whole way through which was real nice.

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    thanx man
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