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    Pointing Fingers...

    Ive never really been on the other end of pointing fingers
    So I wouldnt know the scrutiny and pain that the heart lingers
    But I imagine all the lonely tears that the teased have faced
    Being made fun of for various reasons such as being fat, ugly or your race
    Or because your in a certain crowd and your clothes look a certain way
    Damn it would be horrible to walk down the hall hearing destructive comments everyday
    But you just ignore them and carry on handling your emotions the same way
    Then you go home and cry upon your mothers shoulder later that same day
    You finally make it through a whole school week and the weekend is a savior
    Though this short peaceful bliss away from all the harassment and bad behavior
    Monday happens to be right around the corner and the cycle beings

    I can just imagine all the pain and suffering to teenagers that I have caused
    I never really took the time to take a step back to just pause
    I was part of that elite group who supposedly had no appearable flaws
    Someone elses emotions Ive vandalized like my words had vinyl acrylic latex
    Forever ones memorys will constantly stay vexed
    They fear the spoken word and perpetually fear what you’ll say next
    Its the paranoid outlook on life that youve helped develop
    Keep pushing the limits until one of these kids leaves your school held up
    Then you become there target an they’d like to see how your ego has swelln up
    Take this as a thought provoker and let everything within you linger
    And just imagine all the emotional breakdowns from a pointing finger

    This Night By ELEETE
    The Giving Type By Wise Mynd

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    Great! I was really feeling you towards the end... You should add more to the begining but over all I liked it! 6/10

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    that was a crazze ass story line bro/ i almost lost it but u made it up at the end good shit though... holla back one!!!!1
    when i spit yall know yall gon feel mine/then u see the skill and slow down like after yield sign/

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    This was very nice man...I enjoyed reading this...Liked how you started this piece, got me interested into reading more of it and glad i did, was a nice read...Flow was nice in this...vocab was great didnt over do it or nothing...the content of this piece was very nice, i found it interesting and very enjoyable to read very nice story to this...again nice way to end the piece felt it ended itself very nicely...overall enjoyed it.

    And If You Get Time. Drop Some Feed On My Piece.
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=138912

    Thanks!

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    Thanks 4 All the Feedback Its Much Appreciated. I'll Get At That Piece Credz.

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    Great! I was really feeling you towards the end... You should add more to the begining but over all I liked it! 6/10
    i agree totally

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    Thanks 4 The Feed.

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    Uppin 4 Feed.

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