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VaryAble
Black-L
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Im very able to slay adversaries
im also able to play kill Black's please
Watch it Black, I've studied Wizadry
Ima grab this mic and put you out of you're misery
What u doing here,this art's for people with some flow
This bitch got his fucken dog to help his cum blow
Waste of my time, waste of earth's air
For sucking so much, we'll let u go with the electric chair
But wait one more line to show how my verbals hurt
Ill kill you 20 words per second, letting u know whos the verbal Heir
can you plz try and drop by tonite???
checkin in holla..................................
oh no doubt be easy...............................
My sick flows inflict hoes, wit serious wounds
Wit no excluding included, put simply….this faggot is doomed
Slice an dicin this nigga my Edge is Jagged, he’s ruined
You testin the best and alleged u know what u doin
You aint seein me please cease, I come Right wit them stingers
The way im keyin these frees B I got ya life in my fingers
Cause I ignite wit them bangers…….and bang up this pussy
My lyrical hammer leave ya brains splattered and gushy
I warned you bastard don’t push me……u weak wit ya spit
This little bitch ass nigga leakin skeet from his lips
You lucky im feelin nice, or else you’d really get cracked on
Inform ya friends when I win, you’ve been officially Blacked on
Damn!!!!!
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aight..
Varyable.. your flow was too simple..
the ryme scheme was decent.. but punches were weak..
your Vocab needed work too..
PUNCHES-4
PERSONALS-2
FLOW-6
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black L.. your ryme scheme was better..
it flowed Better and You Had More Multies..
your Punches were Ok.. They Juss sounded Better cuz the Multies..
your Vocab started ok, then ended weak.. the Middle was Ok..
PUNCHES-7
PERSONALS-5
FLOW-7
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Vote- Black L..
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varyable-ya verse was very wack dawg. It seemed like u didnt put no effort into it. Rhymes were just too elementary improve on rhyme complexity and vocabulary. Multis and metas needs to be included more too. i really wasnt feelin ya structure and ya flow.
Black L-ya verse was betta and it was decent enough. you had a betta flow and a betta structure. Betta punches was in ya verse too. Still ya verse wasnt all that. You didnt have any personals either, improve on wordplay. USe more vocab multis and metas in ya flow to win more battles.
v/Black L
can i get some feed back since yall niggas cant vote
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varyable- wack overall verse no hard punches.........elevate!!!!!!!
black L- punches hit harder and better overall verse!!!!!!!!!
return the favor and vote on mine thanx!!!!
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VaryAble - Im very able to slay adversaries
im also able to play kill Black's please
Nope, doesn't rhyme
Watch it Black, I've studied Wizadry
Ima grab this mic and put you out of you're misery
Umm no.. doesn't make much sense
What u doing here,this art's for people with some flow
This bitch got his fucken dog to help his cum blow
Extremely wack line
Waste of my time, waste of earth's air
For sucking so much, we'll let u go with the electric chair
Nothing good, but your best line
But wait one more line to show how my verbals hurt
Ill kill you 20 words per second, letting u know whos the verbal Heir
Your verbals don't hurt if they don't even rhyme haha
Black-L - Your verse was very consistent throughout so I'm not going to go through it line by line. I felt like your verse was very general as you had no personals and could have been at anyone. It also wasn't very complex. However, it had a wonderful flow to it and I liked the multies you used. It was far better than the crap he dropped, props Black
Vote - Black
not much to say on this battle, very below average i didnt see one metaphor, personal, punch or anything just a bunch of " your doomed" and bullshit like that, WELL...........
varyable: not much is to say about your verse but you better start elevating of you want to win some battle, nothing creative AT ALL. structure was alright, but the creativness was horrendeous
Black: you had a some good multis here and there, better structre than vary, but from the side that your supposed to be good and packing on is punches. and you didnt have any, maybe you thought it wasnt necessary, but it really wasnt.
VOTE:black
For this battle, I'd say that black got it. Not because he was great but because he wasn't super wack. When you talked about beating black and studying wizardry i seriously thought, "Oh shit not ANOTHER nigga rappping abput Harry Potter, but unluckily for you, it didn't matter cuz ur content was a lil below par, your closer didn't rhyme, and it wasn't even funny. YOu gotta make the reader laugh, smile or say damn that was creative. You didn't do any of that.
Black you were better but not by much. You started off with a nice (though somewhat played) multie, and then you just went into the habit of calling em pussy, shooting him, and how he has cum on his lips. BE MORE CREATIVE. This will not win many battles for you, you got lucky this time.
Vote: Black
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