The Apocalypse..

[Scriptious]

I believe ive gained my topical skills back..but thats my opinion..
..so would some topical heads drop feedback!.........................

From the beginning, humankind was swarming lands alive
Until resentment altered everything, judgment day had arrived
All continents combine, in the most ferocious confrontation
Only the dominant survive, until gods precocious long oration
To apply four horsemen, to obliterate our worlds continuance
But there dissension changed, they betrayed the lords issuance
Now producing hell on earth, by overthrowing gods importance
And ones that where deprived, seek revenge on living humans
Changing the situation from bad to worse, evil is now lurking
By bringing long suffering to the existing humanity cowering
For years these actions occur, new life is doubtful to take place
Now little humankind thrive, as others turn evil through facades
A changed race, earths population now increased in wickedness
The ones once on top, now inhabit below with sickened heads
Feelings now missing, no heart nor soul, just thoughts of killing
But the worlds wiped out, no victims to torture, grudges toiling
They now confront one another! Evil Vs evil about to diminish
But bringing no hope, The Apocalypse now done in, its finished

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=135803
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=135827

P'z..

[matticus]

I liked the imagery in it. At most points, the rhyme scheme was basic, but I think it worked well anyway, and I liked how you put in some spots where the rhyme scheme, while still the same basic scheme, got complex with an added rhyme or two. My rhyme schemes tend to be basic too, but I'm working on it. Anyway, good OM.

[Scriptious]

Basic lol? cheers for reading anyway..uppin on topical heads for feedback

[matticus]

I might've missed some rhymes, hah, I read fast. :P

[Allen McGregor]

actually Script... duke is right... it was kinda basic in spots...

not hatin but I've seen this same thing done a million times... and this just falls in with the same shit... nothing really new... no different take on it... not even a slick way to present the material...


*sigh*


but then again... da fuck do I know..?

[Scriptious]

Blatently its a played topic..but i needed something easy to take up..soon i'll be doing some good topics..cheers for reading..uppin for more feedback!