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    My Position as the Average

    Replied to Mesmerize-Aprothates.

    In my position, I cannot think of light at the end of the tunnel
    I can only accept my existence at the present and hope, hope
    Is my only reassurance, and invest myself in other's insurance
    Scientifically hope isn't an adequate reason for quitting my job
    Just like in the oceans beneath, air isn't adequate for emergence
    Of the whale...and in my position, I aint ready to turn the knob

    I aint ready to turn the door knob to the steps of enlightenment
    My welfare isn't adequate for my living conditions, my opinion
    Doesn't depend on the misfractions of other ones incompetent
    But my opinion won't feed my 5 children and won't give me some-
    Thing for hope or reassurance. I can't live rich so being prominent
    Can give my life clarity and credentials, with my 20 and two 1's

    My opinion doesn't help my girls get sleep when the drunks
    Downstairs get into arguements and smash everything in sight
    My 2 son's can't get clothing and sneakers from my hoping voice
    My husband won't forge and re-establish our marriage because I
    Show faultering characteristics and a mellow, sympathetic choice
    For a man I once knew and loved. Two options; to die or try

    I once knew this lady who's first impression was I was Islamic
    She assumed I didn't celebrate Holloween, Easter, and Christmas
    For a reason. I know money isn't why I'm breathing, obstacles
    Portrude their way into my life because one person's experience
    Determines character; something like that. Believing it's probable
    That Hell is my prior residence; it reflects on Death's appearance

    ...Welfare, gentrification, debt, self-doubt, anguish, and a broken marriage won't manage...
    When in my position there are still millions compelled, related to thoughts of the average...
    Last edited by spokenoh; July 1st, 2004 at 11:01 AM
    can I kick it?

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    Beautifully Decayed Mesmerize's Avatar
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    I really enjoyed reading this. This was a very different piece compared to the styles of most, and I give you props for that. You had some good emotion in this. I also noticed some multis which helped it flow. Overall nice drop...Keep it up....peace.

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    Uppin this.
    can I kick it?

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    Nice drop MC P. Im feeling what you have to say. The emotion was nice and you stayed consistant. I loved the last stanza the most.

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