10-20 lines.
Due tomorrow at midnight (if not it's a D'Q).
You spit first.
Regular rules...
Stricknine
E-MORTAL
10-20 lines.
Due tomorrow at midnight (if not it's a D'Q).
You spit first.
Regular rules...
Verses are due in 10 minutes.
I'll post mine right after you.
Hurry and meet the deadline or it's a D'Q.
You were supposed to spit first...but didn't make the cut
Must be an organ donor...cause you didn't have the guts
You would not get a vote...if ya were battling for charity
Aint worth 50 cents...if ya swallowed Curtis Jackson's CD
You're not tight...so I won't have to cut you some slack
Oh, by the way...Stryk9 called and wants his name back
Why fear someone of your calibur?...someone your age
Your rhymes are stale...stop tryin to refresh the page
Kid you're wack!...to the point you cause pain and strife
Look how he describes his skill...
Originally Posted by Stricknine
Opened.
I'm a fag, I'm a faggot...
Oh I'm a faggot...
I'm a fag, I'm a faggot...
Oh Oh...Oh I'm a faggot
Hah, this stupid bitch trying to put an end to strick
comming quick with that wack ass shit that he usually spits
how do i know its wack before he spit it, simple because he did it
just stick to sucking dick You never had a chance like one of J-los marrigies
What happened to your flow dawg , did it evaporate?
cuz if wackness was the judging criteria i'd put my hand out to congradulate
You should stick to battlign newbies who cant put two bars together
cause when u battle mcs you get blown away like a feather
The guy changed the time due to get me dq'd b/c his verse sucks
Hes on the toilet shittin stools screaming "im totally fucked"
this bitch about to choke on the sickest shit ever wrote
Cuz like ya flow i leave you already shattered dreams broke
Your stiel is useless and this battle proves this
get use to losing cuz when it comes to rap ya clueless
Some might say the way im beating him is immoral
Bitch I just kileld you how the hell are you immortal
could of waited till midnight before u closed the battle i had my verse ready i know battling me is scary, but no rason to try n pull a bitch move toget me dq'd
I don't know what fucking timezone you're in but it was midnight here. Your attempt at swaying votes will not help you any, so just shut up and let the people vote.
E-Mortal: Nice verse really good, structure was good , punches were great and personals hit hard, flow was good as well overall this was a really good verse, i can tell for you elevation is iminent, battle in elevated front lines from now on. peace
Stricknine: ok verse but very newbish, your lines were strecthed too much and punches didnt hit no good personals and your closer was weak you had played lines like that one about j-lo, try to come with more originality in your verses. keep at it thoguh peace.
Overall: Unevly matched battle E-m start battling in elevated Front lines from now on.
MY VOTE: E-MORTAL
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E-MortalYou were supposed to spit first...but didn't make the cut
Must be an organ donor...cause you didn't have the guts
nice and creative. 7/10
You would not get a vote...if ya were battling for charity
Aint worth 50 cents...if ya swallowed Curtis Jackson's CD
doesnt rhyme....5/10
You're not tight...so I won't have to cut you some slack
Oh, by the way...Stryk9 called and wants his name back
seen this concept, but it was still nice 7/10
Why fear someone of your calibur?...someone your age
Your rhymes are stale...stop tryin to refresh the page
ok...6/10
Kid you're wack!...to the point you cause pain and strife
Look how he describes his skill...
Stricknine
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I Think Stricknine Has ths b/c E-MORTALS punchlines were simple and wack, but stricknines got a little funny, and hit much harder then E-MORTALS
I think both spit a good verse stric just isnt on e's level
to break it down
e nice puches and flow your opener was pretty good and you had a nice finish and the rest of your verse was pretty on point my least favorite rhyme was your 3'rd and 4'th lines
and now for stric
first 3 lines were pretty basic rhymes 4 line sucking dick is played and the line was too long it didnt fit in the next 4 lines you picked it up you could tell you put some thought into the but then it dropped off again
that was a descent attemped of a personal for your close
my vote
e-m
vocab: both need to elevate
punches:i feel like it was a tie no emcee had punches that really caught my attention so i really have no comments
multies: went to E mortal for the simple fact his was more understandable
flow: i felt stricknine won in the flow department even though i didnt really like his structure when read aloud it flowed better
originallity :goes to stricknine because he played into emmortal name in the last first and also threw more punches e mortal had orginality but i felt he could have used more punches
my vote goes to E mortal
pretty good battle..
E mortal you had an awesome opener. your flow was on point throughout your verse. solid structure too. you were pretty creative. you had one played line but other than that your punches and personals came pretty damn hard. Your vocab was pretty good but nothing amazing. Very good use of a quote in the closer! None the less a damn good verse. I enjoyed reading it. Stricknine you need to learn how to structure your verse better... your opener was really weak which pretty much sets the theme of the whole verse. you had a few decent punches, and only 1 wack personal for your closer.. you need to elevate man. try working on your flow... make each line roughly the same length. if you want 2 be perfect match the syllables. Wrk on your vocab too. read more... it'll help with diction and creativity.
Good battle
Props 2 Both
hit up my battles
Peace
Vote - E-MORTAL
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